wat u think guys

[dble-d]

listen ya'll dis a real story bout me its happends, now
its was me and her nothin else but that life judge
i have story and i'll telll may it not the rit place but its the rit time
soo....

{verse 1 }
Hard times, iv come through like death of loved ones-
But with the mic in my arm, this shit iv overcome
hear me , open ur eyes , i cant wait till breack of nit
i wanna live becouse we cant keep predent we kids
llike we used to do hit each other i hit u , u hit me , all nit
talking togother nit and days dats how it was seems
we was tryin to keep the laught now we only have tear
u always far all the time , deep inside me i wanna c u near
ma life filled with lies , and near u, i cant neva cry
dont give up for life dont give up keep the smile in ya face wen u cry
may we take another shot and dream to make another try
But the life is just a paper and pen n every day is a quez
it's just something we have no control over and that's what destiny is
no more question , no more crying , just feel the moment
i wont all my life , wen i get u , i lose u , now i cant sleep
my dreams has come down crashin , on da floor and splashin
all night crying cuz i keep the smile but i have to confess
u r out of my life i m praying to god and confess
but u still hear in my heart barried deeep
we live in da same plant but all universe is one world
one thing keeps online settin on da net
To show her how I feel about her, how proud I am that I got her
tryin to tell u i love you but u dont understand
how emotions just hit, when u spit from the heart-
turn the tv and ya'll see me singing this song
i need your forgiveness dats all about but
Theres no second chances cos these wants are relentless

{verse 2}
Remember back in the day we were like best of friends
But we were falling in love we never could pretend
Night after night we used to talk about me and you
The things we'd do together forever
talking all night holdin yo till the breack off day
now everything go to bad hear this lyrics belive me
this song is honest more then the world u live at it
keep listeng it i try to say but u was dont answa ma page so
i choose to write it a rap song plz 4give me
i m sorry cuz ur name i could'nt say
but may this song change what we feel inside
without ya gurl i fear somethin i neva fear i face somethin i can describ
i hide somethin but i dont kno till wen , hear this song once and throw it behind
may it true wat dey say about love , love is blind , feeling can't feelings inside
i dont care off death cuz in this life we got many thing to do , facing , becouse
whats we have no one have it we were like brother , less then lover , we cant turn around
you made me so happy in the past My love for you has changed, so put the blame on me
we dont talking rit now but inside me u still there
i fear somethin i neva fear i face somethin i can describ i hide somethin but i dont kno till wen
walking in the streets you see me i see you
we try talk but wat happends willl neva be alright ,
now yo hit in look that i can't 4get i want you in ma arms
to b near me no matter wat we have set her in were u belong

HEY GUYS I STILL WORKIN IN COURAL AND IF THERE ANY BODY NO HOW TO MAKE BEAT I WISH PUT HIS E-MAIL .....DATS ALL GUYS

[Dirty D]

rythm was off as shit and the rymes were pretty basic
nothin stood out really and it got kinda hard to keep readin
you should work on your structure and keep on a beat

[kid sick.]

wordness.

[.:SWaTcH:.]

rythm was off as shit and the rymes were pretty basic
nothin stood out really and it got kinda hard to keep readin
you should work on your structure and keep on a beat

exactly ^

[GrimmyReaps]

every thing that everyone else said i think the same Plus you didnt have a name homie thats breakin rules ok keep trying and get you stuff up