Hansom Harry Vs. Sabotage

[sabotage]

^ Thanks b2k i like the explained feedback unlike all the rest of the feed in this thread... upping 2.

[fernoe]

HARRY
I flatten whores on battle boards N leave their faces bloody,
While Sabotage suks on a mike. .like a Jackson bed time buddy.

mj jokes are getting old as hell but sucks on a mike is okay

Your dumb and DONE dunnie. . .^only 2 lines and I bitched yu,
Coz u don’t know how to punch. . .like kids who do Jiu Jitsu.

again punch phonics are old as hell

The title bitch fits you, accept it and know your place,
But ill admit you look sik . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .with all that grease up on your face.

coulda said lube...that would be funny!

. . . . . I would taste that chik ur next to. . .coz that hoe got fitness,
But tell her to get some tips from ur eyebrows-when it comes to thickness.

not bad personal

So fukka curtain shirt wearing virgin, im the best respect it,
Its like im from the Eating Disorder foundation…the way I deal with anorexic’s.

a bit obvious, but okay punch

SABOTAGE
In your public profile it says in your bio that your attractive, witty, and fun
who really wants to be friends with some1 whos unactive, shitty, and dumb?

nice use of internals, good personal, good opener

You shouldn't talk about peoples pictures when you aint got one yourself
cuz even your own family don't frame your pics, they put'em low on the shelf

good comeback,

Sit da fuk down homey, nobody wants to read the mans verse from austria
play your role as the biggest bitch on the entire planet along wit ya posse bra

nicely rhymed,nice flow,nice personal

Your occupation says you a full time part timer. you must not have a life
cause you spend your time pumpin' up your chest and not lookin 4 a wife

another nice personal, this one made me laugh

Nobody would wanna wed you dawg not even retarded homosexual misfits
Its too apparent that when the talented and skilled boat left dock u missed it

strong set up and punchline and closer and good flow

VOTE:sabotage...his punches and personals were less obvious and a lot more original

[sabotage]

thanks fernoe... upping 3 ...............

[Jonezy]

not a bad battle, sab had better punches and personals so hes gets the win


SAB - not a bad verse, some good punches and personals in the verse, ya need to shorten ya lines more tho, they way strected, struture wasnt great either, and flow was quite good, and a good rhyme scheme in the verse.

Harry - some ok personals in ya verse, but they were not as strong as sabs, the mj line wasnt bad, kinda witty, and the grease line was pretty good personal, flow wasnt bad, and structure needs some work.

vote sab

return the favour in my battle in my sig...thanx

[dreamer]

Hansom Harry gets my vote once again because he had better punches and vocab sabotage's verse was legit but it didnt have an impact like HH. Sabotage had some punches but i felt he could have used better vocab. Both mcs had good wordplay but i was feeling Hansom Harrys punches more than sabotages

[sabotage]

upping 2

[¢øS]

~sab got this barely...i felt his punchlines were slightly better
as for HH had some ok shit...but some of it wasnt all to realistic
like him dissing that girl in the pic...man that girl is fine...
whats wrong wit you...anyways sabs pick was aight...
you cant really diss it...so thats why HH failed on that...
just overall shit in here like sab having consistency wit,
punches and personals won him this...i didnt feel HH come,
so consistent...eventhough his was pretty good...
but it seemed like i was reading fake personals and punches
sab needs to fix his structure is was stretched...
HH had an ok struc but take off the bold letters...
vote/sab he came with a more realistic verse...
it was close but thats how i saw it...

[And Death]

Ok...

Hansom Harry - Your structure was alright but it started to get away from you a little towards the end. Your flow was okay as well, but again, you lost it towards the end. Your only personals was about his picture and they came off weak. Your punches were either extremely played (Michael Jackson/little kids) or they didn't make since at all (don't know how to punch/Jiu Jitsu). You need to get some new concepts and elevate. This was a weak verse from you.

sabotage - The length of your lines ruined your stucture. Your flow was good despite the amount of syllables, but it still would have been better if you shortened your lines some. Your personals were okay but you could have changed the wording to make the delivery better. Your punches were alright, but again, the wording took away from how hard they actually hit. At least they weren't played like your opponent's. This was an ok verse from you.

V/ sabotage