my life

[young beezy]

keep in mind im a 16 year old female.......



yall niggas gone feel my venom when i spit this verse
i spit so many tight rhymes people say its a curse
i been in a shell for a minute its time for me to immerse
im a member of the beezy crew look it up i was the first
in this rap game im a 12 grader
shit i got a whole lota fans and plenty of hatas
i get mad love straight outta decatur
other mcs is still scared to give me props
cause im steady throwin hardcore rhymes that don't stop
i stay on the corner slangin rocks
use up all that dough copping some glocks
9 millimeters aks and calibers
everything i do i do it big now everybody wanna sturr
im turnin into a legend while niggas still tryna be the greatest
although im unsigned majority niggas hate this
while im in the studio niggas tryna break this
i already know it its a fact imma be the #1
once i get it aint no turnin back i aint doin this shit for fun
i took after tupac slangin rocks tryna get some pay
but cause i spit fly rhymes i deal wit the same shit everyday
other mcs stay on my back instead of handlin their own
im only 16 but fuck my age shit im grown
fuck the princess of hip hop shit im the motha fuckin queen
i stay on top and im blowin up the scene
now look back at my crew shit im exploiting my team
look at the blood in my eyes im a hip hop fein

[young beezy]

please give some feedback

[Endeva.]

first thing id say is take it out of paragraph form... its easier to follow if you keep it in bars.... the flow was decent... id work on some of the transitions tho, if your writing text.... id also put more complexity in there... internals, multis.... but i thought other than that it was ok... nuthing quotable... but ok....

....holla at my latest OM.... cutting deep..

[Forlorn]

Meh, U should take it out of paragraph form, thatd make it a bit better, work on ur vocab and ryme structure, nice job keep elivating,

Check out my open mic in my sig

[young beezy]

thanx i appreciate the feedback good lookin

[Mistral]

You need to leave a link to a open mic that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[_Crisis_]

it was coo simple but it was alright