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Yeah Im New To This But Tell Me What I Need To Work On..Thanks..

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yo, im only gona give my "opinion" not what u should do, cuz wether u do is up to u at the end of the day.
im not gona say nuttin on the other beats, cuz they r all ok, appart from "whatever".
From what u've called it I suppose you didn't put as much time into it as the other songs of urs. Only thing that bothered me on it was the unsmooth edges of ur bass man, u can hear the click. When i hear an unfaded edge(wich is the click), I close my eyes n i see a mongholian surgeon without gloves or a mask that has just finished opperating on someone and sneezes into the open body.
do sumtin about that man.