thanks

[big-j da fat boy]

people always hated on me and tef
thanks you gave us the incinative to do our best
oh that bulge under our shirt thats just a vest
people try to kill us cause we better than the rest

i aint tryin to be black i aint tryin to be white
im tryin to be what ive ben all my mutha fuckin life
you can call a wanksta or a posa
fuck you mutha fucka i aint throwin props toed ya
preps make fun cause i wear wal-mart clothes
but thats alright everyone aint rich like you hoes
this dude jarin i know he aint nothin but a punkass bitch
if he keeps fuckin wit me he'll end up in a ditch
i dont care who the fucks your deadbeet mother
keep fuckin wit me youll be six feet under
you skater muthafucka
stick to what you do best you damn cock sucka
i heard know one could suck dick better than you
cause your dads had you doin since you were only two
and the freaks at school they smell like shit
when i sat beside them in the gym i could hardly stand it
now this aint the end of this song
ill be back a little later after i get stoned
what the fuck am i thinkin i dont smoke weed
that shits wak it just aint for mees

[ILLunatic]

Eh.. you need to work on a few parts
Your imagery wasn't that great
Flow was a bit basic.
Emotion was basic as well..
Vocab wasn't that great
Neither was your structure

[Mistral]

You need to leave a link to a reply that you left on someone elses open mic or this gets closed, Thanks.

[FUBAR]

From my point of view, I kind of connected with this.
and you should work on your structure. Your vocab much better than mine,
so I can't much there, except for the fact that its good. Your flow was medium. Plain and simple. Your emotion was as said above, decent, but not great.

Run down:
Work on structure
Be more fluent
Add more emotion

Hope this helps.

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