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Thread: Losing Grip Of Faith(Check, dun sleep)

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    Losing Grip Of Faith(Check, dun sleep)

    Sessions of depressions testin and mess my mind
    Tommorow's sorrow shall thrive to tha test of time
    I'm losin grip of faith, losing all the guests of mine
    The worst strings of fate follow, comes the best in line
    The times I had rejoiced was when I was less than nine
    Everything has been trashed, all I have rest are rhymes
    Guilty Conscious devours me, must I confess my crimes?
    I lay below dirt, underground, lyrically blessed but blind
    My pain hurdles over me like a turtle unless I die
    Will I always drown in the ocean, though I get to try
    But it never comes, forever hums, I never get to fly
    I'm never just right with my rhymes, too wet, too dry
    Somethings always broke, too poor to bet my dimes
    I've been on both sides of emotions, swept and strived
    Despite my gas would be empty, I always kept my drive
    Under the dark, I shoutout for no reasons, rep my guys
    Too many times overlooked, sometimes I let my cry
    But despite this, I kept one thing, my rhymes been kept alive

    Losin faith, choosin gates is a hard decision
    Rules n playz, foolin ways with a smart precision
    Seeking for amusin dayz is an impossible mission
    Fuck hearing all this shit, its my time to be listened

    On the brink of shrinking as I continue blinking
    Sinking my ink writing rhymes while thinking
    Never hear my phones ringing despite what I'm bringin
    To tha hip hop game, talkin bout all blinging
    Man these big shot's lame, their rhymes ridiculous
    Tha game is fucked up, at times I'm sick of this
    Beats is probably only why guys be pickin shit
    To sell out is such a sale to be gettin hits
    Forget this kid, to get my name known needs sellin?
    But I find it better than being hidden, no need tellin
    I need this, feed this, bleedless, my bleeds swellin
    Cuts widen, thrusts fightin, I'm breakin walls
    Writin, must tightin for the sake of us all
    Too long has the shadow blinded my sight
    Searching unlimited, trying to find it, my light
    Rewind it then write, always been binded so tight
    Too long have fingers locked around my soul
    Don't wanna age and linger, rockin a town so old
    So old its forgotten, abandoned, no more standin
    Need to be landing blows harder than cannons
    But as time goes by, losin hope is my road
    Abusin ropes that limit me, falls my lyrical abode

    Losin faith, choosin gates is a hard decision
    Rules n playz, foolin ways with a smart precision
    Seeking for amusin dayz is an impossible mission
    Fuck hearing all this shit, its my time to be listened

    Cloudz shroud the sun's light, shadows are the brightest
    Always fail whenever it is tha battle of tha tightest
    Talking about where things go south for all of tha rightous
    Cuz it might just go north or be left with tha lightest
    Colors fade away, left with shades of black and blue
    Mindless, creativity now just fades to a track or two
    I slowly close my eyes, waiting for hands to open
    A grand to slope in, unless its another man thats jokin
    Tired of the games, wired with the frames I possess
    Higher goes my fame, watch all tha cats I address
    But that's far away, a far day that will remain distant
    I close in, nearing and fearing it'll be a faint instant
    My main mission is to escape this fantasy I live
    Gotta gain food for my family, the man in me, ya dig?
    But till then, my hands slip, dealing with this shit I take
    Tired of caskets in baskets, I'm losing my grip of faith

    Losin faith, choosin gates is a hard decision
    Rules n playz, foolin ways with a smart precision
    Seeking for amusin dayz is an impossible mission
    Fuck hearing all this shit, its my time to be listened

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...28#post1310728
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...52#post1310752

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    uppin this shit

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    my allah, uppin this lol

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    *is tackled by tumbleweed* uppinn this

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    Dope drop... Lyrically awesome

    Your vocab was decent, and you kept a multi syllable flow throughout the entire piece... the first verse was 2 syllable rhymes from beginning to end... lyrical overload

    The entire piece had a hungry vibe to it, it would prolly sound good in audio... your flow worked and the emotion was there... I just didn't really like the topic

    Chorus was good and fit in well with the verses.... all in all, nice job and keep writing

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    damn this was dope. you got some talent Gfunk. not often do people that are new to this site do. those multies were straight up tight. structure and rhymes. the flow in this was the best i think. loved the multies. my favorite verse is the first. but they were all tight, even the chorus. props on that man. keep it up. hit mines up wen you see it. thanx.

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    halilujah lol.. finally some catz posted.. thx for the feedback, and appreciate the comments.. good lookin you two

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