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    In The End

    In The Beginning ..

    A soul was concieved, believed to be He
    Who would bleed the earth in it's hearse and cast angel's onto their knees
    A breeze blew in the distance, howl's could be heard if you listened
    Grippin' a hold of sumthin', tear drops caused a woman's cheek to glisten
    No matter how many kisses her husband gave for her soothing
    Using every ounce of her energy to lighten to the color of her mood ring

    She and her husband were branded with hate cuz of this child that they would make
    Scared with "666" on his forehead said to be givin' birth on this date
    The 6th day of June came too soon, was the night of a full moon
    Colored red cause hearts bled, the beginning of the Anti Christ's rule
    The hospital room was silent, except for the shrill voiced baby cryin'
    Out side of the woman a soul was born, but inside slowly she was dyin'..


    Somewhere Along The Line ..

    This soul grew from a boy to a man, unaware of the foretold story at hand
    Society damned the day he'd release, cease his childhood and take his stand
    His feet sunk in the sand, as he watched the beatiful ocean view
    Open to the world, surrounded by people, yet was never spoken to
    Except the chosen few: Mom, Dad and his dead brother's tomb
    His cousin' Damien, the spirit of Lucifer and some other dude
    He never knew why people just stared at him with a hateful glare
    Never knew why he got spit on or wasn't ever mentioned in prayers
    It wasn't fair, he attended school at home, never went out to the movies
    Had no childhood friends, doesn't remember hearing about cooties
    Yet is always rudely put down like he's done somethin' to deserve this
    He knew he wassn't perfectb but he never did anything to them to earn this ..


    In The End ..

    Anger began to overtake him as he felt himself start to change
    Finally releasing all of his pain, it began to rain flames
    On a high plain he stood watching the world fall to ashes and dust
    His sympathy began to be touched till it was overcome by a rush
    Panic plagued the minds of Christians, the myth had finally became truth
    Thruout their proclaimed youth, they knew it all along but was nothin' they could do
    His pain grew from their hate and abuse, for so long he just soaked it in
    Not doing anything walking with his head to the ground, wishin' they'd spoke to him
    They'd broken him, anger seeped thru his pores, he couldn't take it no more
    The world was soon filled with silence except for laughter in the form of a thuderous roar ..

    The aftermath of his wrath could be seen, no longer was the air filled with screams
    People returned to their world of dreams and stood up as the credits rolled across the screen ..

    We Watched Them

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    Damn ..

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    Dope opening lines - clsoer was nice too but didn't maintain the emotion from the rest of the piece - and the rest of the piece had nice emotion - flow was on point - vocab was pretty good - liked the mood ring rhyme - hadn't seen that before anywhere - hit my Breathless or SS: Black & White if you get a chance

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    dope piece
    a well told story that flowed dopely
    some really great imagery and then the twist at the end which i have to admit i wasnt expecting..
    i was really feeling the content thpough
    was interesting and had me wondering where it was going and it ended up continuibg somehwere different than i thought it might
    made the character seem real and comparable to
    illing
    cant believe the sleepers in here..longer than 15 lines n ppl wont read stuff
    props homie

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