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    Arrow ::Inspirations::


    Inspirations



    Nothing but dark streets where denizens living up in the park meet
    Pondering whether to starve, eat, or just spark leaf
    This is what the artists topping the charts speak
    But merely through stealing pictures from the real: ghetto art thieves
    The dead march, feet tarred and cheeks scarred
    And only through the use of arms can they avert harm and reach far
    The teen stars pantomime mannerisms like retards
    But only know the streets from the back seat of a sleek car
    Each part of the puzzle reveals another obstacle
    Whether it's cops, rocks, or trips to the hospital
    Babies being conceived through visits that are conjugal
    And raised face - to - face with the worst existence possible
    School provides little, but grounds for conflict
    And youth is taught nothing but to be happy as a hostage
    Teachers are paid squat then, asked to handle a squadron
    Of angry thankless kids, distracted by bullet dodging...
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    ...Watching the clocks an, debating the path home
    Through the maze of paid dropouts just waiting to blast chrome
    Remain blind to the signs, and get your ass shown
    When you wind up on the concrete bleeding from a cracked dome
    They wonder why children tote guns, "Is it for dope funds?"
    Some, but mostly they just won't run from their homes...none
    Cops won't draw a line between the criminals and victims
    'Cause their minds define the sickness of crimes with false symptoms
    Social economics combined with skin pigment
    And we wonder why young men from the streets are living in prison
    To exist in the system, you gotta go against it
    Being a good inner city citizen offers you no defenses
    The law is only as far as the men who represent it
    And bigotry seems to play a bigger part than they'd care to mention
    I don't claim to be blind, to someone's shade but I'm tryin
    To see the world for what it is, but it takes patience and time
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    If I were to say that I never discriminate I'd be lyin
    But the first step to truth is in facing this crime
    Then replacing the line, that separates into 'kinds'
    Fellow humans and embracing integration of minds
    This verse ain't about my attempted innovation of rhymes
    These are my thoughts on why weak people use race to define
    Their own place and rely, on how they were raised to comprise
    The outlook mistakenly taken for the shape of their lives
    Not only that, but why capitalism's Achilles heel
    Those who never had one chance to make 'The Dream' really real
    Those who won't resort to killing or steal
    And those who will reveal, the desperation's that the nations villains feel
    Spin the wheel and hope...
    If you're lucky the worst lot drawn will be having to deal by breathing smoke
    Sometimes life seems like a fiendish joke
    Where the punchily is dying young and seeing Venus choked
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    Even the words I just wrote evoke more questions than answers
    Hell of a lot of good I do as a professional lesson enchanter
    I don't delude myself into perceiving my expressions with grandeur
    But in search for the spark of truth, my ignorance is a definite damper...
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    I posted this in Open Mic..but..It seems like it's a cool thing to do..Double Post~~~~LoL

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    That is really ill man, very nice. awesome multis but still hadnled tonnes of social issua
    with awesome wording deliverence

    Keep coming with the awesome material you write

    could u give me some feeback on the poem in my sig?

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    nice work, sorry I haven't peeped you before. Shit, multis were great although I'm sure you know that, great ability to make visualizations with your delivery. good piece.

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    that was some dope stuff....
    nice work.....
    good multies.....
    nice delivery....
    good visualization .....
    nice opener....
    good closer...
    overall everything was dope....
    nice good mad propz....

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    lmfao........nuff Sed!! And He Had The Cheek To Say My Om Was Shit > Lol Lol Lol
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    Confused with time, but ok.

    Defenitely nice. You have a lot of talent in poetry. U take inspiration from rap and hip-hop, and take then into a poetry form. This piece was nice. Excellent multi's and emotion. Flowed well. Very ill.

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    ^^penskillz was found to be a biter!! they banned his ass!!!lol this prob wasnt even his work!!lmfao
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