Originally Posted by
xXFresHXx
My thoughts are vaccumed through ears like water through windows,
Thousands of feet in depth my images portrayed through subliminal lingos,
If they understood me I could at least dream of releasin singles,
But my cerebral thoughts and people don't mix like babys and dingos,
I can't grasp onto the fact these people don't have a clear vision,
I can't count how many times I go into depth like division,*
I'm all alone with my concepts that are fucking deep like incisions,
So artists of RB.. Open your ears and get ready to listen,
^^the lines seemed a bit stretched... if you use some alliteration or flip you phrasing a bit.. it will roll of the tongue more... and yea... won't seem stretched...a little heavy handed with the metaphors and such... I like subtlety...
HooK
Its hard to strive when motivation is missin,
Soon I'll be on 'top' when my spirits have 'risen',
That'll be when people realize they are what this isn't,
Then they'll start to ride my dick like bitches in prison,
^^a little clownish but alright...
Their feeble minds were unable to recognize my knowledge,
Some of these retards are even going to make it too college,
My plans of starting a hip hop shop were discretely abolished,
Cause rap was a trend.. and skill was not easily acknowledged,
^^intersting rhymes man... you have a knack for creative multis... and I like that... it brings a new look... instead of the same old rhyming dictionary crap you usually see....
Their memory's are hazy.. And all they've experienced was my sickness,
Thinkin its a disease.. Their brain needs some serious fitness,
But here I am now proving my worthiness at RB with God as my Witness,
Maybe they'll be able too see I'm original like starting a business,
Here I am now with my trend of originality I'm leading,
Not the first to do it but at least I notice skill when I'm reading,
My thoughts no longer dead like they suddenly stopped bleeding,
I'm going thru emotions fast like eating and I'm not even feeding,
^^this self riding theme... is getting tired at this point...
HooK ----> X2
Its hard to strive when motivation is missin,
Soon I'll be on 'top' when my spirits have 'risen',
That'll be when people realize they are what this isn't,
Then they'll start to ride my dick like bitches in prison,