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  1. #1
    PerpetuILL
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    ...The Yellow Markings...

    ...The Yellow Markings...

    Carelessly Used To Go Over A Phrase,
    A Marked Of Yellow Used In A Maze,
    Of Words-, To Determine Which To Keep,
    Staining Your Hands And Fingtertips As You Reach,
    To Brighten A Section A Of A Sentence,
    Looks Like Lemon Yet It Is Sentless...,
    A Tool It's Relentless, Searching The Story,
    As The Yellow Inks Pouring, I'm Put Into Glory,
    Taking Small Details To Use Anywhere Else,
    Swiftly Marking A Territory On Paper,
    Finding It's Place In Your Bottom Left Drawer,
    Touching Up Naratives, Like Rotting Bathroon Floors,
    Search And Rescue For Words, Inkin' It Up,
    Smoothly On Point Not Way of Thinkin' It's Rough,
    Snapping The Cap Off The Enlighten This Pas,
    Scrawling All Over These Notes Of All Sorts,
    Turning The White-Yellow, While The Blacks Stays On Reports,
    A Questionable Item Brightening In Retort...,
    Handy It Is To Take Notes From Large Writings,
    Important Facts Engulfed In neon Lightings,
    Also In Colors Of Orange, Green, Blue, Pink, Or Red,
    Not A Pen Nor A Pencil...The Yellow Ink Is Not Lead,
    Morphing The Words Making The Paper Look Brighter,
    ....I Cryed And Flipped Out The Day I Noticed....
    ......That I Lost My Highlighter......

  2. #2
    kaotic~theory
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    Yo Nice Creativity I Like The Way You Used Ur Mind And Spit To A Crazy Topic....
    I Enjoyed Reading This Peice Not Bad.
    Nice Structure,flow,and Great Creativity
    You Could Of Added A Lil Bit More
    But Overall It Was A 7/10
    Not Bad Keep It Up
    And Keep Inproving
    You Dont Really Need To Work On Any Thing As Far As I Read But Maybe I Dont Know.

  3. #3
    PerpetuILL
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    ...Links...
    -...Credz...
    -...krackat...
    Last edited by PerpetuILL; March 21st, 2004 at 12:39 AM

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    That was some badass shit man, I'd never in a million years think to make a piece on a highlighter..straight dope man. Had me captivated the whole way through..if I were still in highschool, I'd copy this and use it and turn it in...lol, j/p man.

    I like the topic and imagery was awesome, not much flaw to this man, I liked it alot..nice closer too, good emotion.

    Props.

  5. #5
    Osirus
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    lol..good concept man...

    keep spittin..

    peace
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  6. #6
    ¤ƒręsh¤
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    Topic was original.. Flow was decent.. You seem really attatched to your highlighters.. What if you owned a blue highlighter? Anyways, this piece was ok.. It could have been worded better and had better use of imagery.. I think this topic could go alot deeper then what it is.. I'll give it a 6/10..

    Keep elevatin..
    Peace.

  7. #7
    PerpetuILL
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    uppn....
    levae a link ill hit it

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    yo this was good nice topic
    nice structure and shit
    overall i would give it an eight out of 10
    work on ur mutis and meta4s
    but i was feeling it
    return the favor
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