Racist Triumph

[Reeco]

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Racist Triumph

Forever in a far off land
Nothing grows here
Just the emptiness of life
Time seems to fade like dust
With the immortal sound of tears

As tears turn to fate
In which all our dreams are judged
Hope becomes impossible to choose
When the time comes knocking
I try, I am refused

My mind soon realises
That racist examples ignore me
Life becomes unbearable
When I’m reduced to death
No-one will here my cries

So as I drift further away
From sin and my touché
And darkness becomes light
Know this when I am gone
I reign victorious in courage

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[Reeco]

uppin..................................ill return favours

[FanTa ZeE]

yeah, why does this calibur stuff get slept on? i like this piece, short, sweet and simple, but daringly effective, the concept was good and flow was spot on, you don't have to return the favour, but it would help me a lot if you checked my 'rap poem' its called 'Jitterbug' and its just below this thread...

keep droppin

[Evolve]

This was very good. I enjoyed the whole thing. Well done

[Reeco]

thanks for feedback, uppin........................

[Rinaun]

Nice short little piece.Played out topic.But,you handled it well.

[נєм]

iliked it but i preferd Torment that shit touched me.....
it was a good poem i jus didnt feel it as much......

[Reeco]

ok still uppin, also check out poetic torment, link in my sig!! ill return favours!!!

[Marek]

this peice was coo...i actually like your other one better..but anyways, this was short and straight to the point man
i felt the concept that was in this peice, and it was effective,
flow was straight, even though i dont give a fuck about flow or structure in a poem cause
that dont really mean shit...lol..u know what im sayin,
anyway, overall this was a decent peice homie,

return da favor

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118082

peace

[Reeco]

uppppppp.......................................... .

[Reeco]

come on uppin.....................................

[Marek]

yo timeless, the link i left you, just scratch that homie..
hit up my new one

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118387

thanx

[Key Tone]

This was dope i havent read the other ones of yours but emotions in this piece and it was also imaginary piece nice 1 ...

show some love back.,..

[lyricalchick86]

dis was a good topic to write about i like everythin bout it had emotion nice structures the flow of da poem was good keep droppin

[Reeco]

uppin for vet opinions!!!!!!!!!