Dev
COM
As dev does topical and I do text then we decided to drop a verse of each........
16 lines on the topic 'The Internet'
and a 10 line max battle verse...
PLEASE VOTE ON WHO YOU THINK WON OVERALL
example if Dev wins the topical by a mile but just narrowly loses the battle then vote for him... and vice versa
no d/r
PS we've known each other since we were like 4 or 5 so all the personals by each of us are true..
my topical:
An Oblique, bleak world, startling contrast from reality...
..Then...
.....you're hurled straight back from the virtual insanity
No vitality, no interest.... your ambitions are drained
You've met people round the world...
....and been fictiously maimed
Your mission has changed... moving in a new direction
Your whole time invested... in illuding every question
Reflecting on your past... never... why would I need too?
coz....
....."I gotta get this verse done coz I know I can beat you"...
But then a shock..its 3o'clock and I'm at work in the morning
Spend the next day tryna take stock and always yawning....
....."Its appalling he won... I merked that little bastard"
finnally finished work....I can't believe how long it lasted....
Back to the net... my obsession is caressed...
Studied hard on my opponent... like his life is a test...
Suppressed wretched mood... in real life, misunderstood..
In a trance staring blankly.... I've lost my hunger for my food
Last edited by Erupt; February 28th, 2004 at 04:44 PM
Its Electronically powered, at ya finger tip for hours… modem based
IP traced connection to the archives of a virtually placed space
That’s infecting the globe like the 60’s space race… without haste
Reflecting in the amount of peeps signing up each day…
…yes, alotta peeps work… but fuck that… I prefer to play
that’s my economics and from it I create and coordinate my way
With its addictive taste, web like base it captures passing prey
So remember be safe don’t stray cos an offender could be posing
Anyway… that’s my moral slipped cos its ultimately free roaming
Like nomad cloning, it’s a zone in where your name is chosen
And your profile atoning to you, your preferential settings
If you wish, fake confessions cos it’s a community of inventions
From hippy’s messing, progressing to the modern internet
The seated dialect fetching unity to each and every racial sect
Combining cultures without reject, its only boundary being supply
Cos without energy the line is lost… and the whole thing would die
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Once again com’s crashing… the barriers closing quick
Haven’t ya learnt your lesson… from when the train nearly hit
But if the face fits… wear it… and shit, yours does
Don’t forget, I was at camp… when you cried for grannies love
Lmao, at the above… just he denies it to this day
Then there’s the time on shrooms… he thought he was gonna pass away
I could carry on and play… but com’d only take a huff
And im the one who’d have to listen to his shit… after he is crushed
I’ll give em 1 thing, he’s consistant… his experiences match his verses
Cos even if he rehearsed it… you couldn’t plan such a circus
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This guy hates to come at me... wants to turn and run so hard...
He....
.....tried to spit on the phone... so they'd reverse his charge!
So answer what I ask... why'd the hell you come half assed?
I'm bout to give this guy an L... as we deLv into his past!
Born with a twin, you ain't original... know your place
how can you have your own style?........
..........you don't have your own face!
I'll disgrace you...encase you...
....................... what makes you think I'd evade you?
Theres another running round... so your mom could replace you!
When Dev brought his heat.... I didn't even break a sweat
I've paid him enough compliments.......now its time to collect!
*Deleted Dev's post so it fits all together now .. Luck with this.
Upppppin.
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- Artificial Intelligence
TOPICAL
Eh..Originally Posted by COM
Didn't really stick with the topic
Imagery wasn't exactly visable
Flow was pretty good...
Wordplay was also good
A few things could be reworded
But overall.. it was decent.. 13/20
Eh..
Most people can relate
Not much imagery..
Flow was good
Wordplay was decent
Nice verse though.
Overall........15/20
Text
Punches connected pretty hard
Personals were nice..
...pretty humorous also
Flow was good
Wordplay was decent
Structure was good
Overall.........13/20
Punches connected pretty hard also
Personals were a bit harder hitting then devs
... also were pretty humorous
Wordplay was used a bit more
Flow was good
Structure was good
Overall......14/20
Topical v/ Dev
Text v/COM
Overall
Dev 28/40
COM 27/40
This was a hella close battle
Very interesting to read also
But i think Dev got this one
Just by a lil bit more points
on the topical.
COM got my vote for the text
but his topical wasn't exactly
as well developed as Dev's.
Dev did pretty good on the text
but COM just barely edged him over on it.
This was a very unique battle tho,
gotta give props to both of 'em.
V/Dev
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word on the topical... but I ruled the text by much more than you showed........ lets get some elite battler votes in now
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whats it take to get these finished in here.....
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upping....
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flow/ Dev had a gud flow with nice rhymes and a gud wordplay; Kill also had a gud flow but I didn't feel the same thing as with Dev, I don't what it is but I think it's your structure kill that got me confused, if your structure was betta you'd have a nice flow
punchlines/ Dev had some hard punches and Kill....well......he had punches lets put it that way....I felt that Dev's punches came harder.....
personals/ They both need to work on their personals, especially Kill cuz his personals were to played while Dev actually gave sum thought bout his personals
multis/they both had a lot of multis goin on, that made the battle more interesting
Overall: Dev, return the favur man, check my battles in my signature, thx...........
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