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    what silence does..

    A heart once together now so torn apart,
    never did she know he would break her heart.
    A girl so strong, now was destructed,
    the walls around her heart have now been corrupted.
    A boy who fell for her and was once pushed away,
    has now moved on and started a new day.
    his heart was broken by this very girl,
    he would of done anything, she was his world.
    she denied what she felt, so he couldn't tell,
    Litle did he know that for him she fell.
    When they saw each other, they would exchange a glance,
    she thought to herself ' i wish i had a chance.'
    she knew she ruined what they had, but now what to do,
    what would you do if thew person was you?
    would you continue to hide your feelings or let the boy know?
    would you just let it go, or let your feelings show.
    well this young girl hid it all, through it she got old,
    grew sad and miserable, her heart turned cold.
    the boy grew up, now with kids and a wife,
    has a good job, living a beautiful life.
    just to think if she would of spoke up, that could of been her,
    her life would of flourished, and been spectacular.
    but she didn't and now her life is cold and lame,
    all because of her, she is the only one to blame.

    feeback/comments appreciated =]
    Crazy spit, her shyt be emaculate...oNe

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    any feedback or replies? uppin..
    Crazy spit, her shyt be emaculate...oNe

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    this was coo, very heartfelt, your vocabulary was very nice in this peice, the content was so-so,
    and the imagery was the same as content,
    overall it was a decent peice, no hate ma,
    keep doin ya thang

    return the favor

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