He Killed Her

[FanTa ZeE]

I trusted a player and he misjudged my intentions,
Guess there was no hope for us, but such a cruel intervention,
The tension to fall in love, feelings sprung to my attention,
He screwed with my heart in his glove, and even failed to mention,
That i was just one of his 'ladies' a raw slab of meat,
That he could toy with and beat, until i gave up to defeat,
Let him take me, under his wing and drag me along,
On such a short line of string, tight control, he watched over my every move,
Where is the loyalty in that? no wonder i failed to approve,
But i was blinded by emotions, a game i thought i never would lose!
Coming or going? i was powerless to choose, he made the decisions,
He forged the plans, it was him that stole my innocence,
He said he was a changed man, changed my ass! but try like i can,
I can't see the turning point, the day that this 'pimping' began,
Can't pinpoint the time, the second that he morphed into this fiend,
That scorched the childhood from under me, that burned more than it cleaned,
Cleansed by his evil, sold to the world, hung like a dress from a market,
Still i hadn't yet learned! He treat my like nothing, and worth nothing i was,
He told me i was stupid, that my looks were the cause, that nobody loved me,
Excentuated my flaws, i looked in the mirror, and i defied all the laws,
My face stretched and bleeding, my eyes sagged and red,
Tears strained my complexion, all beauty had fled,
Gone like the times, i lay happy in bed, dreaming of true love,
Now replaced with hate in my head, he put those images there,
He's the one to blame, he turned this bright flower, into a spiteful young flame
That hurt those who touched her, tried to break in, to the girl deep inside her
Tried to drill through that skin, she was so depressed, she was so confused,
She felt if she had everything, it meant more to lose,
He produced negitive vibes, he made her take those pills
So that she was rushed to hospital, unbelievebly ill,
He was the reason, her name was carved on the stone..
And he was the reason, she can never come home.

[FanTa ZeE]

uh huh..

pleez can i get some feedback? i'm feeling unloved!

[Se7eN]

this was a nice piece good imagery and good drop, I like the end it pieces it all together like a poetic story, i love this poem alot, fanta, so good drop and I always know you'll drop good shit so I will always give ya feed back..................Good vocab, flow, and imagery

8/10

[Smooth JT]

I felt this deep hun and it was killa mad. your emotions flowed free and look like it all came forward at once. Past memories perhapes that sparked it. It was great and had good imagry. Keep ya head up and a smile on your face. Respect from da heart, peace JT

[angel4u247]

this sh*t is hot and it tell to harsh reality about how someone could make you feel low, low as a rock at the bottom of the ocean. People can control you but killing your self is not always the anwser but anyway the pome was hot cuz keep it up

[shawty"B"]

yo thiss is a GOOD poem, and it adresses a few issues and thats something thats good about this type of poem, it keeps peoples attention, it also has good imagery. i like the way it ended i think it was perfect...

........fav part.........

Tried to drill through that skin, she was so depressed, she was so confused,
She felt if she had everything, it meant more to lose,
He produced negitive vibes, he made her take those pills
So that she was rushed to hospital, unbelievebly ill,
He was the reason, her name was carved on the stone..
And he was the reason, she can never come home.


keep droppin
return tha favor...pleez!! my lates it "sittin here"

....bless