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    Shadows.

    there was something about her - an element that made her shine
    an attraction
    a passion
    or the sparkle that glazed her eyes
    she was the emblem of perfection - a heart made of nothing but gold
    the sweet princess of innocence, a girl who does what she’s told…
    …so if i want to be honest about her - i’d say that she’s blessed
    as she’s one of the few who are popular cause of the brains in their head
    a straight “A” student with a goal to make people feel better
    a girl who’s always hopping through the smoke rings of peer pressure
    and with her future in mind
    she stays chasing her singing career
    with an angel’s voice that makes you smile when she sings in your ear
    her dreams are getting near - so she now spends her days…
    …by the mailbox, waiting for a reply to the letter she sent away

    when it eventually came -
    her hand grasped the cross on her necklace
    while spiralling through her mind were thoughts of “you’ve been rejected”
    and as her neck twitched - she became flustered with tension
    then she finally tore open the envelope to see words of acceptance:
    “your tryout is Thursday at 9 p.m., tina, and i must mention
    that you can contact us with any difficulties or questions
    i look forward to hearing you” and there was nothing Tina wanted more
    cause this was the big opportunity she’d been waiting for

    …it was a big success -
    her singing career was so close she could taste it
    cause she’ll never forget that feeling when she saw the smiles on their faces
    and as soon as they said,
    “to be honest, there’s no one more deserving”
    she leapt with joy as she knew that her career would be a sure thing
    so she left the music hall with a big smile and a skip in her step
    as she allowed the thoughts of fame and stardom to sink in her head
    but it was now past 11:30 p.m. and the streets were dark
    whilst the cold hand of the night had began to squeeze her heart
    something rustled behind her and this noise struck her nerves
    but it was so dark that she could barely see two feet in front of her
    twigs snapped, and she could hear a crackle of stones to her left
    and when she squinted -
    she could see a shadow standing alone by a fence
    it was motionless and silent - similar to the unsteady evening
    yet all she could make out was the pacing chest of his heavy breathing
    inhale – exhale - then another noise cracked from over her shoulder
    so she turned and tried to run - but the heavy breathing got closer and closer
    suddenly, his hand gripped her shoulder and tried to force her down
    then his other hand grabbed her collar bone and she fell to the ground
    she tried to struggle, but he pinned her arms, and…
    …tina couldn’t escape -
    yet she could feel him strip off her garments
    then she felt a sharp pain as her throat jumped to try and scream
    but his sweaty hands smothered her
    and she felt something inside her jeans
    a tear dripped from her eye’s crevice upon her rosy cheeks
    and she’d never felt so alone ‘til she heard her own lonely screams
    it all happened so fast, she tried to fight back with all her might
    but then everything was quiet and the heavy panting disappeared in the night

    and nine months later
    in a hospital bed - she birthed a beautiful child
    it was a handsome boy, who quickly developed her musical style
    but Tina had long quit her singing career,
    that dream was now a fallacy
    as she knew she’d have to deal with her son’s inquisitive personality
    so if he asked “where’s dada?”, tina would say he’s on vacation
    cause how in the hell could she tell her son that his dad was a rapist?


    i guess everyone keeps their own secrets in the shadows.
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    Yes.. the rumours are true.

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    This was imaginary piece of story telling...nice way creativity is shown in this piece from joy to sad..........i enjoyed readin this nice drop

    2 fingers man.....

    what more can i say!!

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    Thanks, man.

    Rise.
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    This reminded me of Bottle Dreams..

    anyways..


    Rape is a horrible thing, and as the story progressed you related to the character and shared in her dreams.. towards the end when she was about to get raped, I actually felt my heartache..thats how much the story touched me..


    This story goes on to prove that you are one of if not the most talented writer that frequents RB.. keep on keepin' on.

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    Yeah, I remember that verse. It was dope when you KO'd me with it, and it's dope now. pz

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    ^ Lol. What up?
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    damn good peice....very imaginary....good story....good imagry....felt like i was really there....good job....kee it up

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