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    Understand Me

    understand i couldnt be a man it jus wasnt me,
    my heart was trapped inside a body, that wasnt free,
    i used 2 sit n write rhymes 2 god askin questions
    but deep inside of my mind i knew he had no lessons,
    jus my souls confessions n daily prayers
    hopin 1 day that all of my efforts will get me there
    get upstairs wit tha man in tha almighty chair,
    sittin carefree wit all of my mistakes laid bare
    i know he knows i tried hard, but lifes got a way
    of makin efforts go wit out reward, or any praise
    still i had faith n kept prayin, still i held
    on 2 tha thought, that Jesus 2 heaven was my way in,
    i hope he feels what i think feels what im sayin
    coz when i feel unheard 'times from tha path im strayin,
    i know i fucked up here n there along tha way
    but u know luck stuck me wit a few wrongs ey
    i aint complainin 2 u God, jus hopin u know,
    times is hard 4 us livin down below,
    but can u show all of us a way 2 right wrongs
    a way 2 move on, a way 2 turn fake brothers, in 2 real ones
    i wanna have 2 believe you're gonna lead us,
    n where i don't care coz i know we need leaders,
    we need things we cant provide 4 ourselves,
    we need saving 2 survive our own hell
    where did we fail?
    i cant excuse my abuse but ima try
    explainin my misuse of this life while im alive,
    can i confide my lies, my darkest memories,
    drunk off tha hennessey askin God,
    'do u remember me?'
    i came 2 u a long time ago, n im still here
    i came from a place of real fear
    rockin a number a fro n beard,
    orange overalls n tears
    u took me in thru a book, takin brothers 4 years Lord,
    i used 2 prize personal possesions like awards,
    used 2 carry my guns like i was holdin swords,
    used 2 walk my duns in 2 holy wars
    but every life i took in battle now i know was only yours,
    i cant explain my actions wit due reason
    cause thru seasons 2 years 2 u, i committed treason
    even knowin right from wrong i kept on sinnin,
    maybe from beginnin it was said i was 2 help the devil winnin
    help the devil bring his level up upon tha whole ghetto
    help the evil spread from the get go,
    but naw u said no u said i had 2 let go
    of tha past n hold on 2 tha future,
    u showed me what it was 2 b a trooper,
    showed me what it was 2 b a man, a father a son
    showed me what it meant 2 be 1
    as 1 of your suns i salute ya,
    God i salute ya,
    u showed me what it was 2 have a future...
    i salute ya

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    This was alright here....structure was ok in this....you had some emotion in there, made it better i thought.....flow in this was pretty good, kinda lost me at a few spots though....had some good vocab in there.....overall a alright piece here...keep at it.

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