~Freedom~

[TheHandsOfGod]

~Freedom~
Ive Lost All Feedom..I Feal My Soul Is Confined
But Inside My Mind..I Feal Unwanted At Times
Free To Be Alone...Free To Feal Unsafe....
Theve Blessed Us with Freedom..But They Take It Away

I Find My Self,With Out Wordz To Express My Self
Never Spoken The Right Wordz In Times Of Help
I See The World,But Time Has Past,Threw The Looking Glass
No Wordz For My Fealings,Maby Sign Lanuage Can Cure The Healing
Ive Lost Many,N Seen New People Evolve Into Life
I Dont Belive In Reincarnation,But Hevean Ull Find
Gold Streets,Enough Food For All,God Will Help Prevail
He Blessed Us With Freedom Of Speach,But With Me He Faild
They Say Ur Free,But Do They Really Mean The Truth
Martin Luther King's Dead,Is That What Freedom Will Do
Freedom To Speak....Is There Freedom To Dream
I Dream Offten,But Nothing Happens To Me
Is It Cuz Martin Was Black,To Me Slavery Is Hatred
Freedom Is Free,But Will Never Be Free,So Face It
U Might Feal It,But The Fealing Is Just a Illiusion
Americans Hated By Many,Im Cought In Confusion
This World Is A Mess,So We Try N Help Others
Only To Be Shut Out By The World,Even Our Brothers
In Times Of War,We Found Out Who Are Alies Really Were
Is This It...War...Hate...Killing...For Freedom
Ive Lost All Vision Now...Or Maby I Just Shut Out The World
I Was Blessed With A Voice,But Felt No Reason To Speak
For Freedom Is Speach,Then I Feal No Need To Be Free
Cuz If War...Killing N Hatred If Freedom,
Then How Is That Truely Freedom For Me........

Ive Lost All Feedom..I Feal My Soul Is Confined
But Inside My Mind..I Feal Unwanted At Times
Free To Be Alone...Free To Feal Unsafe....
Theve Blessed Us with Freedom..But They Take It Away

[Sir Cedrych]

wow deep shit man
nice stuff actually
nice imagery
good concept about freedom

I Was Blessed With A Voice,But Felt No Reason To Speak
For Freedom Is Speach,Then I Feal No Need To Be Free
^^by far the best in your free verse
nice blankverse too
stanzaa and structure was decent
8.6/10

[TheHandsOfGod]

tight...thanks for the feedback..keep hitin this up....aight thanks..holla

[Morbid Manner]

i agree with hypnotic that was deep
and you kept it flowing well the whole way through
and you wernt jus talking about killing people and how good you are
your verse had meaning to it.

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[** P.Dëƒ **]

Damn.. now this was deep ... and u could visualize everything u were saying...very good peom...my grade...."B" ... good work...