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    Echo
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    sitcom keystyle

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    just put my pen to the paper and seven minutes later put the pen down........



    everyday when i come home from school
    i jump on my bed and turn on the tube
    loose myself in some funny show
    fraiser, cheers, seinfeld, which one yo?
    it's theonly way to go to a place where everyone knows
    that your talent shows when you write about shows
    i glow but i get fuckn' putdowns from hoes
    and these bros want my flows
    i can rip it whenever you want bro
    i'll sing you a song before we hit the sack
    clap for me when you get off your back
    sam malone~~~
    you'll never get into the sober zone
    'cause Ms. Chambers left you alone
    fuck the beer, lets bust out the hard liquior
    and we'll get drunk and sicker and sicker
    wake up in front of the make up mirror
    a tear drips from your eyeball
    falls down into the sink, screaming down the hall
    you lean to see what all the commotion is
    it's a crazy notion when he's sleeping with your woman
    and it's fraiser, thought he could never get a girl
    always holds back a woman when she lets her love unfurl
    claims he's not gay, but in this fuckn' game anything goes
    i might claim i'm a hoe
    but you know that i'd do anything to make it flow
    make shit up and spit up lies
    just tp make unsettling rhymes
    and in your stomach it sits all night
    and you run to barf when the time's right
    tick tock, it goes round and round
    grinding myself into the ground
    time to skate onto a pole where people can see me
    put my headon a plate, don't you date eat me
    open my eyes and i'll look freaky
    black eye shadow disguise, i'll look gothicky
    is that a word? i don't know
    i'll make words up just to show
    that i don't think too much when i write
    but tonight i'm gonna bite your ear off (mike tyson)
    wait i'm a chick, i don't have a dick
    wiggling in my pants like i'm ignornant
    your a man who's incompitant
    this is my life as a fuckn' sitcom
    you've heard the Irag people dropping a bomb
    fuck that. entertain yourself with a CD rom
    and write some shit and plat a video game
    some racing game, with a barnd X name
    and your in shame 'cause it ain't cool enough
    fooled the hell outta me, it looked pretty ruff
    guys hitting guys off bikes into the rough
    your hurt, toughen up
    and take off your shit, i wanna see some chest hair
    and before i use nair on my legs and my bush
    we can have some fun, pinch me in the toosh
    turn the tv off, you've had enough
    fluff up the pillow and get some sleep
    and tommorrow watch me again on MTV.

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    Katz.Frost
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    that was aiight. a bit confusing but i liked it. you had some good rhymes. flow was allright but needs work and structure was good. 1 give it 7.5/10

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    thanks for the feedback. lets get some more uupin here.

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    ..a little long..and boring...your wordplay was weak and your vocab to me was below average..your content was weak too..

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    you gotta uppin ya punches,vocab,multis,and put mettaz.it was a good flow,but if you jus put those things in youll be hottt.

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