Good Peice.. great multies great Vocab great flow. all there.. good work, keep it up. i enjoyed reading this peice
Good Peice.. great multies great Vocab great flow. all there.. good work, keep it up. i enjoyed reading this peice
shoot, i rate this a 8/10 overall great peice
^lol...*use edit*^
k..k... Looks so nice all centered like that..:P
The concept here was dope, as usually i exect nothin' less and had high expectatins of this piece, you twisted it here n' there added a sort of shock n' suprise element to it (especially the outcome), kinda had the impression it was based around "Dance With The Devil" (sorta same approach) maybe not..
Flow was nice, you had some decent internals within the piece, you experimented with your rhymes (rhyming words that don't usually rhyme) something you don't see all that often:
"as my visions Fade Away, into distant Shades of Grey
Memories start floodin back of all the childish Games we Played"
"I must of Fallen Asleep Then .. lost control of the wheel
& collided with another car .. whose driver was killed" - dope bars!!
Vocab was tight, you used your knowledge and applied it into making an all round well structured piece. Used the right emotions n' such to really get the message across....4/5 - lacked very little..dope...
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WORD P e r f e c t !
RESERVOIR GODS
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solid story
for once i see somebody that knows how to use multis
nice concept, flow, imagery and vocab
overall a solid piece...yup
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