User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 10 of 10

Thread: just rhyming with Wonder

  1. #1
    Newbie BoyWonder's Avatar
    Join Date
    Dec 2003
    Location
    Killa Capital, England
    Age
    38
    Posts
    21

    just rhyming with Wonder

    raps futures looking bright, and im the reason,
    the price of my rookie card doubled this season,
    my fame is growing, im starting to feel taller,
    everybody knows my face, im the street baller,
    people call me wonder, cos i keep people wondering,
    i hit it no matter if its raining, snowing, thundering,
    you say ur styles hot, i say my styles hotter,
    i pull out so many tricks, they call me the globe trotter,
    i got a mind of money and money on my mind,
    u got the face, u got the chest but u got no behind,
    people try to hate, people try to hot up,
    i cud be on heroin but never get shot up!

    yo dis was just me bored...rate it or hate it....lakers!

  2. #2
    BEST topical writer... Endeva.'s Avatar
    Join Date
    Oct 2003
    Location
    N.E.England
    Posts
    8,020
    Battle Record
    34-10
    Awards OM WOTM SS HOF SS HW Champion OM HOF 25+ Wins
    i can see what your styles about...when i started i was similar...ya need to up the complexity add some multis n internals it will help it along greatly.....jus keep working on it.....pZ...return the favour plz....
    [youtube]99ns8n2S40g[/youtube]

  3. #3
    Banned
    Join Date
    Aug 2003
    Location
    Mifflinburg, PA
    Posts
    6,693
    Battle Record
    12-1
    You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

  4. #4

  5. #5
    Newbie BoyWonder's Avatar
    Join Date
    Dec 2003
    Location
    Killa Capital, England
    Age
    38
    Posts
    21
    yo man wots an internal??

  6. #6
    Newbie
    Join Date
    Dec 2003
    Location
    western australia
    Posts
    8
    wow thats good shit but short i fink
    MEZ FOOLZ!!

  7. #7
    Newbie BoyWonder's Avatar
    Join Date
    Dec 2003
    Location
    Killa Capital, England
    Age
    38
    Posts
    21
    thanks...it was only short cos i was bored...didnt wanna hurt it too much!

  8. #8
    Evolve FanTa ZeE's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2003
    Age
    35
    Posts
    1,419
    Battle Record
    9-6
    yeah..nice concept..but i thing certain lines were kinda played out..just summat to keep ya busy? well, just add some complex vocab..and a few multis and metas..and your halfway there..i like your style..
    Def Poets

  9. #9
    Banned Antonio Banderas's Avatar
    Join Date
    Dec 2003
    Location
    Maryland
    Posts
    1,928
    Battle Record
    52-15
    The good - Nice attempt at wordplay and solid flow

    The bad - Try to use a better choice of words....Use words that make people say dam..... Draw ur audience in....

    5.2/10....Good job

  10. #10
    Newbie BoyWonder's Avatar
    Join Date
    Dec 2003
    Location
    Killa Capital, England
    Age
    38
    Posts
    21
    yo safe all you people for tha advice yeh

Similar Threads

  1. Music what is multisyllable rhyming
    By juelztheking in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 72
    Last Post: January 11th, 2014, 10:50 PM
  2. Still think I'm just rhyming?
    By Kazper™ in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 18
    Last Post: April 11th, 2009, 11:15 AM
  3. just rhyming
    By Interpersonal in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 11
    Last Post: January 14th, 2005, 03:36 PM
  4. still rhyming with Wonder
    By BoyWonder in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: January 1st, 2004, 08:49 AM
  5. just rhyming
    By Vivitron in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 7
    Last Post: June 4th, 2002, 11:32 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •