Corrupted Visions-True Gangsta's (Feat. Gene Pool)

[-uski-]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=99328
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=99042
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...hreadid=100247


(chorus)
its not Good, its not Good
Cause u'll get Jumped in Our Hood
By 2 gangsta that Definetly Would

verse #1: (Written by MC-uski)
True Gangsta?? na U a wanna be who only Got his appearance
walking to the shop Takes Hours Becasue Of this Interference
any Time we wont gene And I are Goin to Commit some Crimes
at night We gona easily Go Up on Stage and spit some Rhymes
walkin Talkin Like real Gangstas Man Ya Don't Stand a chance
if you keep talking Shit bout us we'll send ya In an ambulance
Just full you of fucking holes like you were a damn pin cushion
Stop the pushin be4 the bullets meet ya body and whoosh in
Dresed in Red like ya Bloods but ya not ya just wishin ya was
you run ya mouth but ya get no where so stop dissin me kuz
with a attitude like that u'll get popped in a matter of seconds
Making the street fucking just covered in splattered intestines
yea So times is Almost Up so i have to say Your Not Mean Fool
Now Im Finished Wit ya carckus ima Hand the Mic To Gene Pool

(chorus)
its not Good, its not Good
Cause u'll get Jumped in Our Hood
By 2 gangsta that Definetly Would

Verse #2: (written by Gene Pool)
have u eva wondered what it be like, livin street/
when crimes be bringin the beefs, their’s no heat 6 deep/
so now I stand and I speak, reap my way through the weak/
cuz true gangsta’s seeps between meanings of CV/
listen here, and listen hard, I’ma only say this once/
cuz cussin with us breaks the trust, so when I bust/
I wanna see u fucka’s try and outrun, bullets from this gun/
cuz to us it’s juss fun, lusting blood behind triggers loaded wit puns/
just here to get u stuttered and stuck, but ya luck is punked/
can u say fucked? Take 5 shots, but their’s no shock/
but ya last words begin to lock, cuz u know what’s comin/
with that sixth cock of tha 6 shotted glock, time’s up/
when blackness covers over the hours of the clock/

(chorus)x2
its not Good, its not Good
Cause u'll get Jumped in Our Hood
By 2 gangsta that Definetly Would

[-uski-]

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[Mistral]

This was pretty good i thought....

Uski: your structure was good i thought...you had some good multies...your vocab was alright...the flow of your verse was alright as well..

Gene: your structure seems to be improving, keep at that....your vocab was alright as well....flow of your verse was pretty good...

The chorus was alright i thought..but overall this was a good collab...keep at it.

[lyrical_killer]

Fuck yeah man I mean you had the flow you had tha structure and well you had most of everything except there is one thing I found that wasent that great and that is .................your chorus.......when I make a chorus I try and make it better than the accual freestyle like this ..............


its not Good, its not Good
Cause u'll get Jumped in Our Hood
By 2 gangsta that Definetly Would



like dat its two short and its really not a good flow and shit ............so work on dat..................I liked tha rest though.Keep it up homie!!!