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    Too Cold

    Well college is over,but I don't miss a shit still,
    I'm back on the streets with more weed and bling wheels
    Night-outs or day-ins,I don't care about jobs yet
    I make more green than MBAs from fight club bets

    I'm sitting in the back seat of some friend's car
    Ain't home till midnight, on way to the next bar
    Coughing up more smoke than logs with dying fire
    Stuff in my dude's coat is gonna take us all higher
    Bottles and cans down on the floor,beer and vodka,
    Man,I heard last night your lil brother got caught,ya?
    Where up now fellas,come lets go,I need some more weed
    Jason on the wheel's passed out,now I'm on the front seat
    Gimme the keys,lemme turn left, my homie's crib is right here
    Turn up the stereo, just feel the music release loud and clear
    We're there,lets go man,Aye Preeti step out,here take a hold
    Fuck,guys take a look I think some shit's wrong,she's too cold

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    Re: Too Cold

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ng-399407.html
    ^^there you go



    this wasn't bad as far as the concept... the execution could've been waaay doper though.. you took a really weird approach and left out key points that should've been in there.. maybe mention a girl being in the group hanging out a little more.. maybe even should'a said she was sleeping in the back or something. the rhyme is too weak, but the story is told alright.. decent read I suppose for what it was.


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    Re: Too Cold

    Thanks for the feeds.
    Well,yeah I know I should have given more thought into the story and rhyming.Maybe I've rushed it BADLY.Had added the first 2 bars later,so its probably disconnected.

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    Re: Too Cold

    wtf was tha concept?!...yo no hate this was weak...ya flow was good...but ya lines wasnt hittin for shyt...u just gotta put some more heart n soul into ur shyt...anyways...good flow...no conceptz (that i cud see)...ok vocab...ok metaphorz n shyt...just KEEP ON TRYIN BRUH!!!

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    Re: Too Cold

    i liked that shit man reminded me of some crazy ass nights i've had.

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