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    They Hate Me(Renegade Remix)

    i tryed to bring out some heat on the mic and make a song about how everyone in my state/area disses when they hear something come out thats real talk by me...and they throw up disses...so here it is

    [YOUTUBE]7SIPh6pR1e8[/YOUTUBE]

    its the Brip at your service,i can tell your nervious
    i mean for god sakes its the best rapper in purvis
    killin all his verses and all clowns he versus
    and soon there wont be such thing as a circus
    So sit back and watch as i merk this,hurt it
    why you guys still try im still looking for a purpose
    1 rhyme after rhyme could leave you wordless,worthless
    but im not done see iv just scratched the surface
    im so cocky at the moment becuz people see my firmness
    they see im better so the thoughts they try to burn it
    swirl and turn it into somethin rediculous and stir it
    thats how a hater is made,from a household to a hater parade
    they try to bring me down and they say what they say
    my image they try to fade,and persude me to leave the game
    just becuz every other bar i spits a grenade,rappers decayed
    for me to just some how lose it,is what they pray,but see
    their to pussy to just step up so they hide in the shade
    to you rap is just rap but for me my life it portrayes
    so if they hate,let em hate becuz its a trate to debate
    of ways to escape their own fate,create words to taint
    my spirit but its blant you anit stoppin me from being a great
    dont get me wrong im far from mississppis great iv got enough on the plate
    not even in the top 8,all i am is Jhh but thats enough to create
    diversitiy between all haters setting off their emergency for all of eternity
    but see,ill just leave their rappers in bergendy,are you feeling me ?
    sealing me,concealing me,yet revealing me ? if your dealing wit me
    get ready to see R.I.P very clearly,Im at the best of my ablilites
    is what im mirroring,i say what i said,when i pick up my pen
    whether i go down or asend rappers just dont get,i dont care
    i just spill my feelings out whether it was meant to offend
    so i guess its time for you guys to hate me then,itll be ok
    becuz ill juz poor my feelings out and hurt yours again
    and along with your soul a mic will be sent


    Chorus
    They hate me ! just becuz i spill my feelings out
    they hate me ! they are tryin to stack their body count
    they hate me ! they are really about to find out
    they hate me ! all over the floor ill spill their feelings out
    They hate me ! just becuz darkest dealings out

    Verse2
    See i write down my emotions and what cracked me
    and all of a sudden all these rappers attack me
    out of the blue,why i havent the slightest clue
    all i guess is you all get scared of what my skills dare
    so you try to throw disses and you think your rocking it
    all your really doing is putting Jhh diss at the top of it
    hardcore rap image,rapping about 9s you dont own to grip--its pitful
    and for me to rap with you is a privilage? when really im
    the mence i could spit 1 bar and burn down your whole villige
    mr.sins-ter my lyrics they blur but what they dont get is
    my lyrics is like a emotional blizzard,feelings flitered
    but then you punks wanna whisper act like im bad when
    half you bitches could get blown to smithers,wait wow !
    thats a kidder,talk about shit i dont have ill hit the billboard
    yeah,yeah smoke crack and kill whores,tight rhyme yall
    tore-- it up the win ya sealed it up...but what you fuckers dont
    get is you can hate and opinonize fucking rap its self
    but what toy is left to play and the rest on the shelf
    so fuck all you phony rappers,i hope you fuckin melt
    and leave you all with the cold feeling thats felt
    and all the darkest dealings are delt,so fuck it
    all you rappers i eat and belch...sorry if your feelings
    were hurt so much they cant be felt but.........

    Chorus
    They hate me ! just becuz i spill my feelings out
    they hate me ! they are tryin to stack their body count
    they hate me ! they are really about to find out
    they hate me ! all over the floor ill spill their feelings out
    They hate me ! just becuz darkest dealings out

    Links coming !

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    Re: They Hate Me(Renegade Remix)

    this is quite long and will most likely get slept on tbh. anyway if this was written with plans to go audio? i think you need a more consistent flow. like the first part of each verse goes with the beat well and then you add more in sacrificing flow for detail and are most likely just planning on spitting that faster? i'd try to avoid that. not bad though

    rtf http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...109/index.html

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    Re: They Hate Me(Renegade Remix)

    So seeing as how I'm on my iPod I can't listen to the video but I read it and here's what I thought
    there was good vocabulary and in the beginning good flow, however in the beginning verses where repetive in my
    opinion cuz like in one verse you would bring up a point and say it twice in the one line. On the good side there was good multis an I think you should add a lil more imagery. Keep on writing brah

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    Re: They Hate Me(Renegade Remix)

    first off i appreciate you puttin the beat on the page so i wouldn't have to look for it.. second i did like the flow on it i was able to follow it pretty well. didnt really like the hook but it prolly sounds better than how i read it.. overall this was a decent peice.. would like to hear it if you make it an audio.. let me know if you do..

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    Re: They Hate Me(Renegade Remix)

    thanks for all the fb i appricate it and yeah i did plan on making it into a audio piece just made it a written to get some fb on the lyrics here mostly and true,i do see some repetitive parts and ill work on that,again thanks..

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    Re: They Hate Me(Renegade Remix)

    uppin...

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    Re: They Hate Me(Renegade Remix)

    uppin

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    uppin lets get sum fb

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