Step by Step Introspection

[Engivale]

Step by Step Introspection





I'm the proof of livin' loose my excuse is blood shot,
Eyes with tired lies spoken wise corrupt thought...
Bad luck brought by the why's of what's not,
Dot your eyes and bring lots of supplies to trust's spot...

I'm a homeless guy reaching
.............Let me focus my teaching-
Decides each thing brings direct hits
Expect this reasoning........
I met this evening with a princess of spades,
Instants are paved, I'm in and out of love so fast
.............No lasting opinions are made...............


What it isn't is fine, the past is in its decline...
2007's the time to live with presence of mind,
No more peasants or grind,
No more payin' for bullshit...............
That we made to make you and me the slave,
We're FULL OF IT!
Emancipate what? The freedom of who?
We're all oppressed by the man who's 'cut out' to lead me and you...
Just cleave me in two, mind and a body?
Just tryin' to rob me of what God really is -
.............. All of me.
The policy's broken so I sit awake and wish away the
Knowledge that's known to men...

Speed the tempo
"Damelo ... si siento!"
Literal meaning is deceiving when read to flow
Head to toe end the show curtains up,
Alert and up to certain stuff but sure enough "no tiempo..."
........Oh, don't play the end, though!
Hit the chord rip the word again while
I search your words for "en".....you-endo!
Spend, "No.... piensos, pagas mi .......con tus silencios!"
Offer "vidas o muertos", spanish "c"'s lost at which
"estar" and "ser" are switched "los conciertos!"
It's not fair to most, But I couldn't care to post
Any answer gives why I use spanish in this candid boast...

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We falter in God's eyes cuz we worship these false lies...
The idea of "me" is clearly deceived and across lives...
We shape our thoughts on a few major plots of the same story,
The Torah, The Qur'An The Bible and when and why will men understand the "core me?"
It's a surface thin reflection of my nervous introspection...
I'm scared of what I'll find if I get too deep in my mind's complexion...
I know that its worth it to think different from "perfect"....
It's bein' a little crazy that's always made me assertive...

[Facts Machine]

Nice concept and rhyme-scheme. You def had some good usage of words in there.. i liked these rhymes...

Speed the tempo
"Damelo ... si siento!"
Literal meaning is deceiving when read to flow
Head to toe end the show curtains up,
Alert and up to certain stuff but sure enough "no tiempo..."
........Oh, don't play the end, though!
Hit the chord rip the word again while
I search your words for "en".....you-endo!
Spend, "No.... piensos, pagas mi .......con tus silencios!"
Offer "vidas o muertos", spanish "c"'s lost at which
"estar" and "ser" are switched "los conciertos!"
It's not fair to most, But I couldn't care to post
Any answer gives why I use spanish in this candid boast...

^That whole part was dope as fuck... i know spanish, but those who dont will prolly still like it.

You have a very different style of writing in which i can always tell it's you that wrote it, keep this up. Dope shit all around...

Please rtf here...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ts-347509.html

[Engivale]

Thx elemental I looked at ur piece, dude.

Links...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ts-347509.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...al-346983.html

[Jawn Raw]

yea I liked this piece, nice concept and a really slick rhyme scheme man. when cats use different rhyme schemes in topicals it just seems cool. somin different to read instead of the basic rhyme at the end of each bar. but jea you really had a nice piece here, really nice concept.

rtf here: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...cs-347539.html

[Jamir B.]

Speed the tempo
"Damelo ... si siento!"
Literal meaning is deceiving when read to flow
Head to toe end the show curtains up,
Alert and up to certain stuff but sure enough "no tiempo..."
........Oh, don't play the end, though!
Hit the chord rip the word again while
I search your words for "en".....you-endo!
Spend, "No.... piensos, pagas mi .......con tus silencios!"
Offer "vidas o muertos", spanish "c"'s lost at which
"estar" and "ser" are switched "los conciertos!"
It's not fair to most, But I couldn't care to post
Any answer gives why I use spanish in this candid boast...

That part was illy. Like the usage of spanish, creative. I felt like the flow was on point and it was nice concept. Good read.

[Morbid Dream]

I'm the proof of livin' loose my excuse is blood shot,
Eyes with tired lies spoken wise corrupt thought...
Bad luck brought by the why's of what's not,
Dot your eyes and bring lots of supplies to trust's spot...

Dope... loved the "wise corrupt thought" oxymoron

What it isn't is fine, the past is in its decline...
2007's the time to live with presence of mind

The bells rang hall of fame here^^^

The spanish thing was cool...As a non spanish reader u couldve used it a bit less. A+ for flows and rhyme schemes. Wordplay and placement of words was perfect. Sometime flow was off but then you seemed to make up for it. I wasnt sure where you were going with the worship yourself as God thing...I guess you were saying people need to get real with there motives and really worship God.

It's a surface thin reflection of my nervous introspection...
I'm scared of what I'll find if I get too deep in my mind's complexion...

nice. Tru artistry


RTF

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...it-347683.html