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    Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    The scuttling spider, so grotesque
    yet it’s silken web a token beauty;
    much like the token handles
    on a wooden oak door;
    why singular, why aren’t there 2 handles?
    One set for left hands, one for right
    one for women, another for men
    a reductionist’s wet dream;
    Racial profiling would mean
    There would be a set for everyone.
    Yet the ignorant only know so much
    so there won’t be any colour papers;
    just a black and white newspaper
    being read by a black or white man;
    with his hand on a black pawn
    nearing its death by a white knight
    on the black and white chess board.

    They say that a metaphor would work
    but why shouldn’t I use a simile;
    why say the pain is east and west
    a necrophiliac compass;
    when I can just tell you friend
    that my back is like the whipped slaves
    of yesteryears, lashed and hunched.
    I’m an oxymoron in myself;
    so relaxed and stressed, burning in heaven
    whilst bathing in hell;
    churning in hunger whilst eating
    that even 500 messiahs
    And there 500 fishes couldn’t fill my bread.
    Then tell me why is my hunger sedated
    when I should be famished?
    Having not eaten, flesh stretched thin
    and my mind’s so ravished.

    What if the woman you loved was a mirage;
    a hideous plastic undercoat hidden by
    blind cupid, what if she were a hooker
    Would you buy her services, or was it personality?
    The odd category created by society,
    the skewed sense of sensibility
    and upper class sophistication.
    It’s probably probable,
    these days obesity is thick
    and since fat became phat
    every coloured woman wants a bigger canvas;
    so she can show more of the colour
    that she’s so proud of, clicking her fingers
    While sucking the spittle between her teeth;
    she seems obviously ignorant…
    but a minority can’t be ignorant.

    To tell a bum to get a job will get you shot
    so live in this world of wrongs;
    this world of politically correct speakers
    with their inner racial frustrations;
    so angry, that they covet red ants
    whilst trampling on the black one’s
    one a day at a time.
    Come live in my world…
    it’s in mental retardation.

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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    Rocket Man.

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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    Trust Judas.

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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    Leave some comments you people who see.

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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    i'll get this in a few, prom

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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    this was a very vivid piece that use metaphores in a million ways.it was very colorfull in the use of words to bring forth pictures to the mind.your vocab and everything brought it out even better and it kept my attention all the way through.this is a really good pice and i dont know why it doesnt have any feedback.

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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    Nice piece my friend.

    Though I do feel there was an overdose of content, much of it was quality. That is hard thing to do for the most part, but well done.

    The range of topics here are random in my mind, thus the poem is somewhat of a rant obviously. I think in each paragraph you stood your ground well and sarcasm was the tone you kept through most of this.

    I enjoyed the imagery that you gave me and how much thought you forced me to put into what I was reading. The only problem was that because there was too much thought, I couldn't feel as much as I would like to and because of that, if you were trying to convince me to believe the things you were saying, I'd be a bit skeptical. Anyway, I couldn't connect personally with the things you were saying but the language was fun and in some ways inspiring for me. keep it up!

    if you see my piece, please check it out.

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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    sorry it took so long to get back...


    this was actually really good to me... I can't say that I've ever followed along so well with a piece you've written compared to this one... it was just full of real shit... and the metaphors backing each statement were like, whoa! slow down! lol. each line had it's own purpose and meaning, you didn't drag at all, and though you seemed to over-analyze things, that's exactly what you meant to do. you were touching on the same point it seems with every line, but all the concepts were different... leading to that ending "the world is a fucked place, try living in it" mentality... real enjoyable, nothing I can see in here that was bad. I think the only transistion that was almost too random for me was going from obese woman being cool to bums... lol, it felt like a weird jump from concept to concept, but it still connected. good read... good enough to hand a nom I guess, it couldn't hurt!



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    Re: Ruling Rulers Ruse Retards

    Gave this a few reads to take everything in. Not that the concept went over my head, but I wanted to digest every image in a proper matter. Alot of things were said in this piece, running a risk of going off course. But you kept a steady pace and by the last stanza , everything was wrapped up in those last two lines, speaking on hocked hp this how fucked up this world is getting. loved the tone, as I read it aloud it left a great impression and I'm still nodding my head to this piece as i type this. Great work all around.

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