The Past by Grand (produced by Deli Beats)

[MGrand15]

all links'll be returned so drop em.

rough draft of a track, any feedback or thoughts are greatly appreciated.

http://soundcloud.com/mikegrand/the-past-by-mike-grand



LYRICS:
Success is a lie rejection disguised
Im waving good bye im tired so I
Im hitting this bowl and getting so high
So I can go sleep without the monsters inside

Success is a lie rejection disguised
Feel like im going blind all I see demise
No matter how hard I try I need to remind myself
I need to find myself I need to CRYYY
Getting dizzy from the mood swings
Too sick too much shit that my fucking mood brings
Tired of the fake smiles tired of the memories
Tired of the small talk tired of the therapy
Everyday it change me everyday it chase me
Started as a bother now its what fucking made me
the good times they don’t last they just finish then van-
Ish quick and you try and pass try not feeling so bad
Try forgetting what actually happened
Its too much of a task my mind cant even fathom
Im going crazy lately please try and stop me
Stop me in my tracks cause my past still haunts me

Take rejection away – the infection is plain
Im feeling insane – the feelings ingrained
The feeling is harsh – I need us apart
I need you to stop coming by when im dark
Cause you not my light – you making me worse
You bring up whats old – that is what hurts
You bring me back to the times when I was feeling like dying
Make me feel like dying – shit should be a crime
Im telling you you old news
used to be around all the time I would hold you
But I let you go – help me let you go
Heart is hanging on – but im screaming no
Are you completely passed it? I need to know
Don’t even ask, just keep up the show
Act like you the same – don’t show the pain
Cause you the past – that you means that you’ll go away

links:
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...473/index.html

[Joe Boston]

Like the beat sample is hot ill concept i like ur delivery u pause at the right times and get back into it and get mad intense. I dont have any criticism to give everything sounds good man looking foward to hearing more.




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[I-M-E]

haha the beats cool, sounds like an 80's rock sample....feels like im listening to a transformers soundtrack haha......vocals sound a bit hollow, but your voice is good on this, delivery is good, flow is alright, lyrics are pretty dope...

[RobbieAnthem]

this shit is legit right here great song man. Keep up the flow and real concepts this is real hip hop right here

[Gonzo]

I like how you approached this joint ..the idea is there but the flow still falls off just a bit sometimes..lyrically feels thought out and you tried to go deep, thats whats up..a good effort over a bangin beat...keep em comin dog

[Milk Man]

lol @ IME sayin 80's rock sample, it sure does hahaha. yo, the beat is cool tho. i really like your lyrics, not too complex but REAL. This reminds me of somethin dipset would do, your swag is cool. i like how you makin your own style. you got a accent, cant put my finger on where you from, but it works. quality needs work, your vocals sound a lil hollow. this sample is flames. you should throw somehypes in the chorus, just to hype it up like some UH YEA UH that type of shit lol. 2nd verse is cool too... you dont really have a smooth flow, you kinda swag your way through it, but i dig that cuz its uncommon. again, lyrics are real. shit dont have to be complex to be ill, just needs to be real and i can tell that you get that.

overall, decent track. if the vocals were crisper this would have replay value... but for now, just keep doin what your doin cuz its raw, real hip hop from within you. feelin it.

[MGrand15]

lol @ 80s rock sample - i like to keep my music diverse. thanks for the comments and the listens guys, really appreciate it. boston, ill get at ur track in a few.

[talksic_dire]

listening, dope beat, quality is a little lacking, your delivery is slightly off, its like you almost captured what your trying to do, gotta turn your vocals down, dope lyrics and what your spitting about, the mastering is just off a little.
dope hook..
2nd verse, dilevery needs work, simple rhyme scheme, emotion doesnt seem like its there,and it seems the further the song goes on it gets a little worse. but keep it up bro, you have potential, just didnt capture what you were trying to on this track.
6/10 no hate.

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[Mr_Microvave]

HAH YES!! all you need to do now is create an old 80's movie trailer to go along with it.

I love this beat. Good stuff my dude.

[Rishi P]

hitting u bak sorry for delay....aiigh quality def needs work...hmm not feeling this flow homie too many pauses and its like u holding back....wtf wher eu go lol the sample came in, real shit i feel it but you need to deliver this a bit better....sample in beat is cool

overall not bad man but work on that flow keep dropping tho

[Rishi P]

hitting u bak sorry for delay....aiigh quality def needs work...hmm not feeling this flow homie too many pauses and its like u holding back....wtf wher eu go lol the sample came in, real shit i feel it but you need to deliver this a bit better....sample in beat is cool

overall not bad man but work on that flow keep dropping tho

[PVizTheWiz]

The beat is dope...your flow could be tightened up a bit and you could work on your enunciation a little more.

Peace and Blessings

[MGrand15]

HAH YES!! all you need to do now is create an old 80's movie trailer to go along with it.

I love this beat. Good stuff my dude.

lol the music video is gonna be one of the training montages.

thanks for the listen though guys, really appreciate the feedback. if yall drop links im willing to hit ur tracks up.