damn, wasnt expecting such short verses... knowp, storywise i prefered yours, although, some of your wording seemed odd, specially at the beginning... trajik, i thought you had a slightly better scheme goin on, but the story lacked grunt for the topic you ran with...
overall im gonna have to vote/knowp
quite close though
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Nicely written--both of you guys.
Overall, I liked KP's verse a bit better than Trajiks. I felt that he developed his story a little bit more while still maintaining a good flow and rhyme scheme. Trajik, your verse flowed better than KnowP's, however, I felt that you focused too much on the rhyming--some of your rhymes seemed to be forced--and that took away from the development of the story itself. I felt you could've worded your lines a bit differently and given more emphasis as a result.
Anyway, I liked KP's verse more for its content and so my vote goes to him.
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KnowP - good drop - like the vocab and imagery - flow was good but seemed forced in some places, or i just didnt see it, Overall from what others havn't said you kept the simple, short, but enough to leave an impact.
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Trajik - also a good drop with you, your flow and vocab were good, but i think you forced your rhymes in spots and it took away from the piece. Sometimes putting a rhyme is not always best, but i thats my only reason i think your concept didnt hit as hard as it should have, but still a good drop no doubt
For overall consistency my vote goes to KnowP
Vote: KnowP
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This was really close to me. At first read I actually had Trajik winning. Trajik had the better wording and rhyme scheme, I felt as though KP's wording was odd. However, KP had the better content, imo. So that's where my vote ultimately fell. Good job to the both of you.
Vote: Know P
Know P wins (1-0)
Trajik loses (0-1)
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