if we've come this far?

[GrimmyReaps]

We've come this far...

If we’ve come this far, then I believe
Are lives up to par, perfection we weave
Dreams become reality and the fake fades away
Like roots grown with vitality some spread astray
But if we’ve come this far, the end must be close
My smile shines bright like a star, happiness we approach
A house, a whip, diamonds, and life in a steady grip
Any kind of troubles we skip walk together never slip
And as I sleep I dream of you, as always I felt loved
Like on cloud nine way deep in the blue, my beloved
Everyday like a new start, to something so right
As the drum beats from my heart, as day turns to night
And I feel as if it will never fail
I still love you……. This is my fairytale….


Can we keep going?

If we can keep going, it’ll be good
But fairytales have ends and I knew it would
Fights as we argue over nothing serious
Are lives mysterious as we act imperious
Snooping around, lies and life full of deceit
If we’ve come this far its to easy to be beat
But can we keep going that the question I ask
This is my task, as I pull down my mask
My wife hasn’t came home and its 4:00 am
She’s probably out there fooling around with men
And I feel as if it is about to fail
I still love you…This is my fairy tale

Is this the end?

As I pull on my pants and shirt I think
Has this glass of love filled over the brink
Or has it been empty waiting to be filled again
Has she left me I think as I pick up my pen
A suicide note I write before I take my life
It seems that’s the only thing to do it must be right
Am I wrong? Because if we’ve come this far
I can fix it I know I can, so I walk out to my car
I drive around for a hour then see where she’s at
My best friends house, I don’t get it so i pick up my gat
*knock knock knock*

"hello is anyone here, becka are u in there
ryan come to the door. I know there having a affair."

The end

so I open the door and look in the house
And what I find is the clothes of my spouse
I panic screaming out her name, who’s to blame
was this all a game, took me for a run of shame
Treating me like a trained dog, so ill sniff her out
I know she’s in this forsaken house, hate starts to sprout
Open the main door and I see her there, I just stair
He’s pulling her hair, I can feel my heart tear
I yell hurt as I pull out my gat, pointed at my head
I turn it and point it at his back, I want him dead
I pause, thinking is this bitch really worth doing
I turn and walk out and leave and life I’m renewing
Now its over but I know that I didn’t fail
I can mold my own life this is my fairytale….

[GrimmyReaps]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ed-346656.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...rr-347124.html

[GrimmyReaps]

rise...damn

[Cataclysm.]

lol^

ok,

this was real nice, i liked the imagery and emotion you put into this piece
it was like real graphic..like a anime cartoon but a serious one instead, or some ish..anyways the emotion got to me a lil, cuz it was just that nice
the rhymescheme was on point IMO cuz i really couldnt find anything wrong with it and same thing with the structure it was practically perfect to me..
overall this was just a nice piece..keep writin and droppin

[GrimmyReaps]

tks homie...uppin for more feed do sleep on it.

[LedgenZ]

Thank for the reply, I'll drop feed on this when I log back on later today...it's a promise I've been known to keep.....so look for it.

[Ntalek]

This was a nice drop..but I'm not a big fan of the rhyme scheme..seems to simple..with few internals..kinda hard to flow out...but I loved the topic and take on it..you jamed the piece with emotiion and it worked...I felt the the ending contain'd the majority of the emotion..but that's what gave this drop it's edgey feel..you were very descriptive about his feeling for her..and his thoguhts of the situation...this was a solid drop here and it's pretty evident that you're getting that Grim swagga back..dope ish kid...keep dat pen moving.

[GrimmyReaps]

tks uppin...

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rise

[Ace of Aces]

good stuff here. the flow was a bit slow for my taste, but it worked for this material. For poetic/deranged love type of piece. The metas in this were coo, I think they aided in your explanation. What I liked most was the detail of the piece, brought in some good imagery. Emotion came second hand with that which brought this out to life. if it wasn't such a morbid piece, i think i would have liked it more. lol. i see where you came from wit this. best stanza:

If we can keep going, it’ll be good
But fairytales have ends and I knew it would
Fights as we argue over nothing serious
Are lives mysterious as we act imperious
Snooping around, lies and life full of deceit
If we’ve come this far its to easy to be beat
But can we keep going that the question I ask
This is my task, as I pull down my mask
My wife hasn’t came home and its 4:00 am
She’s probably out there fooling around with men
And I feel as if it is about to fail
I still love you…This is my fairy tale

^cool stuff.

plz go vote on this battle, so far its only gotten looked at by ignorant kats:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-346985.html

peACE

[+Cloun-Around+]

i wanna hear this recorded. i could see this happening. pretty tight.

[GrimmyReaps]

^^^ uhhh....ok.....great feed lol...

[GrimmyReaps]

damn rise...

[GrimmyReaps]

dont sleep