your flow was flawless...
your multis was good...
your vocab was good...
your focus was on-point...
your creativeness was nice yet simple...
^^ meaning it was good because of the vocab and concept but simple because the concept was about your love one which is not hard to do but the way you did it is hard to mimic i hope you understand and is not confused...
fav lines:
She was my everything...
When our eye’s first met and locked into focus
I saw a beauty unmatched, yet often unnoticed
My first word’s burned as I burst and an emoted
An invocation of interest, while the infinite prose’s
To be written then exposed with, a heart full of gold
And a tongue full of slogans, of the lock on my soul
From your hot little pose and the voice you compose with
Had me caught in the moment, robbed of my breath
Lost in the current’s and motions of an emotional ocean
Invoked and emboldened, confidence open exposed with
The way I was walking and controlling those moments
I was selling myself, now I’m buying you roses
Those shoes you admired and diamonds imposed in
Platinum bands with white gold in the bracelets
Proud of our devoted flirtation’s despite being devoted
And mated, we remain with focus and patience
-Love under pressure, held up in the waves
When through thick and then thin
Didn’t get between us, it just thickened our skins
So if you’re listening in, this is unprecedented dedication
-Together to death,
and when you rest, I’ll reminisce and embrace it
-Bringing flowers to your grave,
with tears on my face till my day’s end
always remebering,
she was more then a friend.....
lmfao i could not just pick a line i thought the whole shit was good man and very well enjoyed...
9/10 ( the highest i ever rated any open mic so far )
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