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    Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy

    I was sat in the high-chair with beans running over my chin ..
    In a sheer smattering of sauce they sat,
    Cold on my skin.
    And as I stared at the food before me,
    My coiled hands dwelled on the soft ..
    Pristine, plastic, panels of the fortress that held me aloft.
    Then towering above a trail of toys; I picked up a spoon...
    ...gripped the maroon handle, and flayed with poise as I made a noise!
    A wave of joyous rapture beamed across the front of my face ..
    As with my spoon,
    I conducted the imaginary drums I would play.
    I craved the rhythmic ensemble, and the thrill it evoked ..
    While swinging my arms wildly,
    Hoping to hit a familiar note.
    With no audience for the drummer boy who cautiously stared ..
    Just the crescendo of the metal spoon that tore through the air.
    As the cutlery clanged and crashed,
    Hitting the plate with a prang ..
    In the silver head of the spoon,
    Reflected the face of his dad.
    Its rounded scoop made daddy's eyes bulge; Cold, hard and pallid ..
    And though I was too young to comprehend them fully -
    The words he mouthed were barbed with malice.
    Turning the spoon slightly,
    I saw mom in tears that ran from her eyes ..
    With those strong, sculpted, arms of my fathers clamped to her sides.
    He shook her violently,
    His stubby fingers raked and clenched her hair ..
    And I could only watch on,
    Helplessly,
    As her stoic, frail, body was thrown against my chair...
    The impact was followed by one rasping, loud, gasp of sound ..
    As my fortress' tall, elongated, plastic structure came crashing down.
    The spoon soared from my hands as I looked in awe ..
    Its cold, metallic, drumroll -
    The last thing I heard before my head struck the floor...
    And there I lay,
    In a silence that echoed this cruel, tortuous, blow ..
    My red-flushed cheeks now pooled by the blood that poured from my nose.
    I awoke in a hospital bed with tubes attached to my stomach ..
    My father was sat at my bedside -
    And I cried out in an attempt to say THAT bastard had done it...
    The accident had rendered me brain-dead,
    Unable to have fun, to play,
    And Daddy's little drummer boy would never get to drum again.
    Now, twenty years later,
    I sit in a high-chair with beans running over my chin ..
    In a sheer smattering of sauce they sit,
    Cold on my skin.
    The beans sticking to my face,
    Beneath the consumate heat of the sun ..
    Where I attempt to lift my spoon,


    And dream of once again beating my drum...



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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Nice piece...

    The strong point of this piece was the
    story and it's imagery..the imagery was
    strong throughout the entire piece
    with real good wording to carry it.
    The word usage I somewhat liked
    not really my taste different to me but
    I still took a liking for it.

    Like I stated before the imagery was
    nicely done with the boy sitting in his
    baby chair I suppose those chairs
    where babies eat their food of course
    with food all around theirs mouths about
    to have a feast and banging their spoons
    rapidly... having fun etc..

    you created that image in my head which
    makes this piece imagery wise strong..
    the content was strong as well..
    but I think without the imagery the story
    would have been week but since you did
    have strong imagery it helped the story told.

    I was sat in the high-chair with beans running over my chin ..
    In a sheer smattering of sauce they sat,
    Cold on my skin.
    And as I stared at the food before me,
    ^My favorite lines

    anyway this was a really good read.

    Stay writing.

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    i gotta agree with illus..those were my favorite lines too
    this piece was very nice, i liked reading it too..
    the emotion was on point and so was the imagery
    the wording was meh, couldve been better but i still liked it
    overall this piece was a nice read, and the structure was dope too..

    keep writing

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    damn..i keep running into this piece...lol..very nice work..BM.....the imagery was amaizing...i was feeling the concept..this was very well crafted....nice work
    Let The Requiem Begin.....

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Damn fine piece here. I must say the imagry was ridiculous in this piece. There was not a moment throughout the entire piece that i couldnt vivedly picture what was going on. The flow seemed flawless to me untill a couple bars a little ways past have of it, where it kinda made me lose track but it did quickly pick itself back up. Now alhough the imagry was terrific i felt the emotion lacked a bit. I could really see what was happening but i real didnt feel what was goin on if that makes sense. You did really capture my attention from beginning to end and im glad you left the link thomas..

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Why is everyone saying to me to keep writing damn this isn't my piece i posted it for my friend lol. And another thing nobody on this site should even be telling Baron to keep writing because he is at the top of the net. I mean the dude laughs when i ask can you beat Bounce. Anyways more feed please.

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Shouts to Mentor on the postage!

    Good looks fellas, I appreciate it. Seriously. Still the king of RB after 7 years in the game, DAMN!

    - C a m Z i l l a !

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Word no worries man.
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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Just read this, Baron is a fuckin G for this one.....
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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Do you guys mind if I up this?

    I wasn't around at the time to see any of the responses, and I liked this joint a lot.

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    fucking HELL dude!

    you haven't missed a beat since i last caught up with you here.. tough storyline.. loving the imagery and word choices to this joint.. jesus.. i remember you being good, but never quite this good.

    you upped your whole style a lot since we first joined, what was it, 2002? Verbal Konvicts? ILL? haha crazy times man.. the descriptions to this piece were what made it for me, awesome story telling skills right here.. and the tie-in repeat fromthe beginning was D O P E [!!]

    no idea how you still manage to pull these off. i might try writing something up shortly. be sure to check me out.

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    Baron did a great job with this one. The storyline was nice. He executed it incredibly. It's very powerful.. To think this kind of stuff actually happens in real life. It's sad and all over a relationship issue. A kid has to be forced to live a vegetable for the rest of his life. This was awesome, Baron. This was dope. The imagery and word choice were also nicely executed. The flow was smooth. On point. I give ya much props and thanks for the read, dude, and thanks Messiah for dropping this dope piece for Baron. I enjoyed it..

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    Re: Baron Mynd - The Little Drummer Boy.

    wow mayn that was so good...i read it thinkin...THIS IS KIDDY SHYT...then u started n with the abusive husband shyt n i was like OH FUK HE WENT LIKE THAT!!!...then u just topped it off with that amazing ending...propz to tha WRITER!!!

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