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Thread: Self-hype verses

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    Self-hype verses

    Not sure if everyone will be able to understand the flow and i know some parts of this are weak and need to be worked on but here's what i got so far... and again don't expect much this is one of my first writtens, the first one i've spent more than a minute on. also didnt use any rhyming dictionaries


    working every night to hone it, with a pen and a pad
    verses disectin my opponents, like you would in a lab
    my acid spit spews in cones, if you get hit then im glad
    burns off flesh leaves the bones, so dont you get me mad
    its sad to see you all alone, when weaknesses are shown
    i can see where your prone, all my strikes are KOs
    i burn my enemies like blunts, if they tap then i lone it
    im ill, no pills, i do this for fun, skilled spills you know it
    i tear down my opponents, every single verse i own it
    see when i spit a verse you take a turn for the worst
    it's a like a curse to be the first one to visit a herse
    i kill the time when i spit a rhymes but half the time
    you can't tell whether your eyes, are gonna well
    up with tears or instill fear cause what i sell
    your ears will hear, but what you get it's a bet
    like russian roulette it's a gamble from the get
    go, i wont let or slow, i dont sweat when i flow
    when i let one go, you can hit the snare
    standing hair not rare when i stare, you scared
    your bare, i bare bear strength go to any length
    wont spare, no care, not fair to be paired against
    Last edited by sockerdudex; January 16th, 2011 at 02:42 PM

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    Re: Self-hype verses

    "working every night to hone it, with a pen and a pad
    verses disectin my opponents, like you would in a lab"

    this line is dope. Some of the others are weaker, keep working at it. I like how you avoid using rhyme dictionaries but sometimes they can help if you are really stuck.

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    Re: Self-hype verses

    Had some decent lines;; Some to scratch your head on;; Flow was choppy, If you took your time on it, and really thought it out, it could do well.. Basic braggdacious drop, I think if you worked on the flow, and upped your vocab, it could work out a lot better..Check out my drop if you got time http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...342/index.html

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    Re: Self-hype verses

    my acid spit spews in cones, if you get hit then im glad
    burns off flesh leaves the bones, so dont get me mad
    A really good line, I get a nice feeling from it, but I think that "so don't you get me mad" would flow a lot better, but it's up to you.

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    Last edited by KnowP; January 16th, 2011 at 09:25 AM

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    Re: Self-hype verses

    thanks for gettin me those links!

    re-opened for feedback!

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