Turn On My Swag (0-0) vs. Smalls (2-1)

[Dios de Hip Hop]

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[Jackie Moon]

check. 18

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-0-394259.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ch-394289.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-2-394249.html

[Nick.]

yep.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-3-394251.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-1-394247.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-2-394249.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ch-394289.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-3-394252.html

[Nick.]

i got a good sense for ladies. known to come off the rich menu..
but it doesnt take someone with an eye for women to see the bitch in you
even match up? lmao, u'll get punked when im pist
shit.. ur only faceoff will be the chunks on my fist
mcdonalds aint workin homie. u aint quick, u've been dumb
bitch you couldnt hold a stable job cleanin shit from in one
ill break ya chick in for ya. ill fuck her as i curl kegs..
you got a style so widespread it could rival ur girls legs
u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book
i was never good with gardenin, and i know u cant compete..
but it doesnt take a green thumb to faceplant u in the street
i throw one hitter quitters, always lookin for someone else to brawl
so if u start to find urself in trouble just be happy u found urself at all
u aint blowin up. ill paralyze ya, u'll be able to taste the tingles
you couldnt tare the roof off this bitch if u were replacin shingles

16.

[Jackie Moon]

Online geek, heard you all over the net, day and night, it's a tragedy,
first you COD, then world of warcraft while runescape from reality.
Suck at billiards and rap, your wording is so terrible you belong in a bootmatch,
throwing punches? your English is so fucking off all you end up doing is scratch.
Nigga if your tattoo is as good as what you write, then your not getting the win,
so if someone actually likes your scripts its cause it comes with your neck and chin.
Acting like you getting a lot of sex, that's probably true and shit,
because you do get a lot of pillow talking done since your face is in it.
Nick's whole style is booty, and yet he deems it hot
Fuck his verses, his sig represents a continuation of what he drops.
Ass after ass, and no one likes this fat fuck, people feeling him? hardly,
type to have his cake and eat it too cause no one goes to his parties.
stupid ass and a poor fuck, always trying to be booted and thats true..
..a shoeless bitch so when he says 'sock it to me' its cuz he needs them too.

im entering a thong contest lol.. ill be the only dude in it but i pride myself on havin a ghetto booty

I thought you were trying to be ironic with the name smalls you prick,
type to enter a girls contest and lose in the category of biggest dick.

[Hexzen]

even match up? lmao, u'll get punked when im pist
shit.. ur only faceoff will be the chunks on my fist
mcdonalds aint workin homie. u aint quick, u've been dumb
bitch you couldnt hold a stable job cleanin shit from in one
u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book


Decent verse... some witty shit in there forsure. You stayed on point flow wise through out which was good to see. Your bars were short sweet n to the point.


VS


Online geek, heard you all over the net, day and night, it's a tragedy,
first you COD, then world of warcraft while runescape from reality.
I thought you were trying to be ironic with the name smalls you prick,
type to enter a girls contest and lose in the category of biggest dick.


Swag, you suprised me i thought you'd be completely wack but I def saw some potential in your verse. If you filtered out the bad wording in some of your bars they could have been decent. the sock em line could have been cool but the wording murdered it. I'd say work on your wording first cus the concepts were there.



Overall - Ima have to give it to smalls because his bad bars werent as wack as Swags... He was more consistent.


Vote - Smalls.

[Kontext]

u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book
i was never good with gardenin, and i know u cant compete..
but it doesnt take a green thumb to faceplant u in the street


v.s

I thought you were trying to be ironic with the name smalls you prick,
type to enter a girls contest and lose in the category of biggest dick.

straight battle but I thought smalls took it here....had a better overall verse
swags verse couldve been nice if his wording was a lil better

[Cody Nash]

i got a good sense for ladies. known to come off the rich menu..
but it doesnt take someone with an eye for women to see the bitch in you
nah..
even match up? lmao, u'll get punked when im pist
shit.. ur only faceoff will be the chunks on my fist
okay-ish
mcdonalds aint workin homie. u aint quick, u've been dumb
bitch you couldnt hold a stable job cleanin shit from in one
terrible wording.
ill break ya chick in for ya. ill fuck her as i curl kegs..
you got a style so widespread it could rival ur girls legs
played as fuck..
u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book
okay.
i was never good with gardenin, and i know u cant compete..
but it doesnt take a green thumb to faceplant u in the street
indirect diss.. word it harsher..
i throw one hitter quitters, always lookin for someone else to brawl
so if u start to find urself in trouble just be happy u found urself at all
liked this..
u aint blowin up. ill paralyze ya, u'll be able to taste the tingles
you couldnt tare the roof off this bitch if u were replacin shingles
eh, no..

vs

Online geek, heard you all over the net, day and night, it's a tragedy,
first you COD, then world of warcraft while runescape from reality.
no.. terrible..
Suck at billiards and rap, your wording is so terrible you belong in a bootmatch,
throwing punches? your English is so fucking off all you end up doing is scratch.
eh..
Nigga if your tattoo is as good as what you write, then your not getting the win,
so if someone actually likes your scripts its cause it comes with your neck and chin.
nope.. doesn't make sense.
Acting like you getting a lot of sex, that's probably true and shit,
because you do get a lot of pillow talking done since your face is in it.
wording could've been doper, I like the concept though.
Nick's whole style is booty, and yet he deems it hot
Fuck his verses, his sig represents a continuation of what he drops.
liked this..
Ass after ass, and no one likes this fat fuck, people feeling him? hardly,
type to have his cake and eat it too cause no one goes to his parties.
nah..
stupid ass and a poor fuck, always trying to be booted and thats true..
..a shoeless bitch so when he says 'sock it to me' its cuz he needs them too.
eh..
I thought you were trying to be ironic with the name smalls you prick,
type to enter a girls contest and lose in the category of biggest dick
nice



bleh battle... neither of you came with much of anything.





vote Smalls, barely though. I wouldn't be surprised if this match went either way.

[Chrit.]

i throw one hitter quitters, always lookin for someone else to brawl
so if u start to find urself in trouble just be happy u found urself at all

vs

Nick's whole style is booty, and yet he deems it hot
Fuck his verses, his sig represents a continuation of what he drops.

Smalls: really played stuff in there... wording wasnt bad... just nothing that stood out.

Turn: a couple decent concepts... but also some HORRIBLE ones... wording was poor... work on that an the concepts will seem way better

v/Smalls do to his wording

[Dios de Hip Hop]

u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book
i was never good with gardenin, and i know u cant compete..
but it doesnt take a green thumb to faceplant u in the street


v.s

I thought you were trying to be ironic with the name smalls you prick,
type to enter a girls contest and lose in the category of biggest dick.


swag you are getting better. you need to work on wording for the most part and also brainstorm better/ more unique concepts and word them harshly. you're closer shows that you do have some potential but you arn't on the level to beat any LLL heads yet. If you keeping working at it I can see you improving though. I vouch for you to stay a couple more weeks to see how you improve but as far as this battle goes Nick outshined you.

vote: nick

[phlymo]

i got a good sense for ladies. known to come off the rich menu..
but it doesnt take someone with an eye for women to see the bitch in you
^played but ok
even match up? lmao, u'll get punked when im pist
shit.. ur only faceoff will be the chunks on my fist
^nah, seen a few things like this, not enough to stand out here dude
mcdonalds aint workin homie. u aint quick, u've been dumb
bitch you couldnt hold a stable job cleanin shit from in one
^i've seen stable flips, but solid
ill break ya chick in for ya. ill fuck her as i curl kegs..
you got a style so widespread it could rival ur girls legs
^lol but i have seen the concept before
u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book
^something about this one just didn't come across for me. iunno.
i was never good with gardenin, and i know u cant compete..
but it doesnt take a green thumb to faceplant u in the street
^slightly loose connection but decent
i throw one hitter quitters, always lookin for someone else to brawl
so if u start to find urself in trouble just be happy u found urself at all
^decent
u aint blowin up. ill paralyze ya, u'll be able to taste the tingles
you couldnt tare the roof off this bitch if u were replacin shingles
^nah



veeeerssssus



Online geek, heard you all over the net, day and night, it's a tragedy,
first you COD, then world of warcraft while runescape from reality.
^nah, needed a different approach, didn't work imo
Suck at billiards and rap, your wording is so terrible you belong in a bootmatch,
throwing punches? your English is so fucking off all you end up doing is scratch.
^weird here, i see where you were going, and assume i'm seeing a tie between billiards and scratch, but the wording is fiddly and detracts from it too much.
Nigga if your tattoo is as good as what you write, then your not getting the win,
so if someone actually likes your scripts its cause it comes with your neck and chin.
^this didn't work too well as a diss, cos it kinda suggests they rather like his neck and chin.
Acting like you getting a lot of sex, that's probably true and shit,
because you do get a lot of pillow talking done since your face is in it.
^solid, but i've seen similar and wording was still a little off. much better though
Nick's whole style is booty, and yet he deems it hot
Fuck his verses, his sig represents a continuation of what he drops.
^pretty cool here
Ass after ass, and no one likes this fat fuck, people feeling him? hardly,
type to have his cake and eat it too cause no one goes to his parties.
^alright-ish, kinda soft sounding but the verse is picking up
stupid ass and a poor fuck, always trying to be booted and thats true..
..a shoeless bitch so when he says 'sock it to me' its cuz he needs them too.
^nah, bit cheesy
I thought you were trying to be ironic with the name smalls you prick,
type to enter a girls contest and lose in the category of biggest dick.
^bit of a simple joke here imo



weird battle this. smalls didn't come his best, definitely not. his wording is solid and he tends to flip his concepts well, but he comes up with a lot of decent stuff that's already been done. nick if you get fresher you'll be a really strong competitor, but you need to check some of your shit before posting. i'm sure the search engine will throw out results for stuff like 'widespread' if you wanna see if stuff is played.

swag, i'm not sure i've read anything from you before. you had a stronger section in the middle, mostly due to a sudden shift toward clarity. several of your punches really suffered from bad wording, which is a real killer. ultimately, this made your verse a less smooth and less enjoyable read than nick's, so nick gets my vote. still, coolness.

v/smalls

[Tony B]

mcdonalds aint workin homie. u aint quick, u've been dumb
bitch you couldnt hold a stable job cleanin shit from in one
u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book

vs

Nick's whole style is booty, and yet he deems it hot
Fuck his verses, his sig represents a continuation of what he drops.

well, i know it's already been said but turn..ur wording killed u man =/

v/ Nick

[Sting3r]

i got a good sense for ladies. known to come off the rich menu..
but it doesnt take someone with an eye for women to see the bitch in you

Far too simple. it's more of a statement than a flip in this context

even match up? lmao, u'll get punked when im pist
shit.. ur only faceoff will be the chunks on my fist

That's old, truly. simple wording

mcdonalds aint workin homie. u aint quick, u've been dumb
bitch you couldnt hold a stable job cleanin shit from in one

ok. decent Word play. You could have worked it a bit better, but this was good.

ill break ya chick in for ya. ill fuck her as i curl kegs..
you got a style so widespread it could rival ur girls legs

if you're saying his style is widespread, that's not a diss. saying his girl's a whore, that's a diss. but it's like saying, you're good, but your girls a whore. sorta counter productive for a diss.. lol

u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book

lol.. that's clever. shya laBOOF BIACH

i was never good with gardenin, and i know u cant compete..
but it doesnt take a green thumb to faceplant u in the street

i like that flip. cool

i throw one hitter quitters, always lookin for someone else to brawl
so if u start to find urself in trouble just be happy u found urself at all

lol.. something about the wording is just funny.. simple, but funny

u aint blowin up. ill paralyze ya, u'll be able to taste the tingles
you couldnt tare the roof off this bitch if u were replacin shingles

ehh, tear the roof off/ shingles.. it's an old concept, wording isn't so nice.

Vs.

Online geek, heard you all over the net, day and night, it's a tragedy,
first you COD, then world of warcraft while runescape from reality.

kinda corny. The punch isn't worded so well

Suck at billiards and rap, your wording is so terrible you belong in a bootmatch,
throwing punches? your English is so fucking off all you end up doing is scratch.

ok.. a billards concept. But your main error here is that in the literal sense.. you're saying his english is so bad it's scratch.. now that makes absolutely no sense when read with out the "billiards" context. it has to work both ways.. cool concept tho

Nigga if your tattoo is as good as what you write, then your not getting the win,
so if someone actually likes your scripts its cause it comes with your neck and chin.

a bit simply stated.. just a gay joke really, and the wording isn't amazing

Acting like you getting a lot of sex, that's probably true and shit,
because you do get a lot of pillow talking done since your face is in it.

cool punch. It's not the most fresh of lines, i've seen it a few other times my self. but the wording is good

Nick's whole style is booty, and yet he deems it hot
Fuck his verses, his sig represents a continuation of what he drops.

not bad, decent flip

Ass after ass, and no one likes this fat fuck, people feeling him? hardly,
type to have his cake and eat it too cause no one goes to his parties.

bit of an old concept here, ok punch

stupid ass and a poor fuck, always trying to be booted and thats true..
..a shoeless bitch so when he says 'sock it to me' its cuz he needs them too.

lol.. wording is good.

I thought you were trying to be ironic with the name smalls you prick,
type to enter a girls contest and lose in the category of biggest dick.

just don't like the concept much.. punch was ok tho

smalls: pretty consistent. couple good punches.

fav:

u hold too many problems kid. really.. just duck, ur shook
u got enough holes in ur verses to re-write the fuckin book

i was never good with gardenin, and i know u cant compete..
but it doesnt take a green thumb to faceplant u in the street

Swag: You had a couple good lines. Work on coming up with newer concepts..

fav:

Nick's whole style is booty, and yet he deems it hot
Fuck his verses, his sig represents a continuation of what he drops.

over all// easy read, fairly close battle

v/smalls

[Token]

Nick wins (3-1)
Swag loses (0-1)