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    Left Alone

    i dont get why do i gotta feel this way
    somebody give me a route to escape
    i need to get away from all this pain
    right now i just wish i was slain
    if you knew how i felt you'd understand
    cant cry tho i want to cuz ima man
    i thought it was all good but is not
    lord please let me know when the hurt gon stop
    the hurt dont stop it just piles up
    i guess i was born to be hurt, life is rough
    you dont want me to go so i wont go
    i'll just sit here alone crushed at home
    ill be by my-self i dont need nobody else
    ya words hit me so hard that they left welps
    so now untill i die i dont need no help
    ima just sit here lettin my heart melt
    dont need no hook i just keep flowin
    my hearts been broke but i keep goin
    no cure for the way i feel at the moment
    i just hope to catch this feelin and condone it

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    upping for some feed
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    uppin for feed
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    ok i see you took the short n direct approach.. that was fine, but u lacked a actuall scheme, it's the the one you had was so basic it hurts n ya vocab coulda mede up for it, but it was so simple.. i know sometimes simple is good, but this was a lil to simple.. work on using image words to help give life to ya writtens, does it 100% suck.. no i've seen people come wayyyyy worst, so just take this as constructive feedback, no i'm not saying i'm better than you in any type of way. i know how you newbs are

    overall keep @ it n keep dropping

  6. #6
    im not a newb lol

    i was in your crew once
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