damn you had a dream about that,,, that tight that it was dream yet u turned it into a peice.. that was ill man.. good shit. keep at it.
damn you had a dream about that,,, that tight that it was dream yet u turned it into a peice.. that was ill man.. good shit. keep at it.
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Don't agree with the guy who didn't like the flow. Frankly, I thought it was great. Good to see that people are approaching different styles rather than the same old style of flow.
Story-Telling was actually nice. Different approach than what most MC's take, but you actually made it work. I really liked how you started off certain parts with "run...run". That really adds to the imagination of the piece. It creates the illusion in the mind of somebody striving for something...something like to get somewhere.
Overall, very good job man. I liked it. One of the few topical pieces that i've read at this site, and I can see that there are some good writers here. Keep doing your thing man. This piece was great.
good to great job here...nice take on the topic, stuck well to the idea..flow was good, but kinda fell off once or twice - no big problem
as stated by everyone, you really did do nice here
good job! seriously
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Nice drop W1cked you came real nice with good imaginary if it was imagined. I can never tell with your drops because there put together so clever.
Last edited by Foreshadow; June 22nd, 2004 at 02:43 PM
This pz was by far the realist shit iv read on rb in a long while. I cant even tell you to keep elevatin cuz your already there excellent job.
Felt poetic but still good for an om
You had great emotion throughout,a decent rhymescheme,and a very good and deep story.
This piece was great!
Breathtaking shit. The storyline was very dope. I thought the flow was decent, but I liked how you did it. It was more complex with all the pauses and some dope multies here and there. The emotion is really what made this piece great. I could feel it all the way threw with help from some good imagery. There isn't really anything bad to say about it. Nice drop man..... Keep at it.
Well first off I have seen that kinda concept done before and
to be honest it doesn't grow old on me. Maybe its becoz of the
orignality and emotion that is brought out from each victim etc.
Your story was vivid and you created a verve which I could catch.
Flow was off sometimes but YOU dictate the flow in your way
so its not for me to judge.
There was a part where you vent shit from 3rd person which was
good to see coz that jus shows how your skilss can develop.
The 2nd stanza is what drew your best flow. The tears rolling
etc was nice. And it was apparent to the story.
Overall this was a solid piece and it has made me want to read
more of yours. I guess my first opinion of RB has changed.
Good writing n keep it up.. Oh n I don't rate on a scale lol.
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