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Fire in The Sky
Fire in The Sky
By:Spekz.
Dusk begins to embezzle
The remains of the golden reign.
While faint sight struggles fear,
our fixating eyes soon glisten
Off the stilled reflective water,
Playing hand with our survival.
Silence directs our blueish lips
For we have become guests.
As darkness recites prayor
On tide to embody host
For we dine captive
To a starving night.
Lost, we prepared for amazement
Yet the only walls confining us
Hold breath, as we float.
Choking back frozen tears
Brisk air punctures a reddened chest
clothes mummify stranded humsicles .
Bodies living on the wills of their peers
fearing the night will swallow life.
Splashing waters promote energy
Hoping for a sign of savior.
The raft begins to thrash,
Tossing as though possessed.
Devil fins split the water
Turning calm tides
To hell bound currents.
Fear stuns those still breathing,
Shaking in pools of good-byes.
Few remain living now
Resting on torn rubber.
Limbs seem completely lost
Breaths sigh but barely.
One of the men decides
To pull the trigger to the heavens
Praying the fire in the sky
Will bring them the warmth
Once granted by life.
HONK…HONK
Eyes wander livid
Inside a bodied casket
Recognizing the sign of help.
A frozen smile breaks ice
To those still fighting.
Time passes as though
Traveling by glaciered tug.
As the saviors arrive
To the destination lit
By that of the fired sky
they simply relinquished hope
just as the flame of life
did for those who dined
as the meal served
to the blood chilled night.
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Re: Fire in The Sky
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Re: Fire in The Sky
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6328618
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Interesting way to change it up a bit in the end dude. Liked it quite a bit. Wording was really something here dude, you always have the most well written piece when you write dude. And it's great. The imagery is always very visual in your pieces dude. Vivid description of lines.. really nice. Emotion was pretty cool as well in this read dude. Liked it, keep writing bro. Not one of your best, but a good read with little to critisize.
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Re: Fire in The Sky
Word this was dope..I was really feeling the wording in this piece...very descriptive..and it made more of the already fine tuned imagery you placed throughout this piece..I think the overall topic and concept was cool...your take on it is what had me into this read...all of your mechanics were up to par in this piece..man so props on a good write..and could you RTF pls...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-365861.html
