Black - Life is a Motion Picture.
catch every word,
yo, ...
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open your eyes.
light reflects, the solar aligns ..
transmitted signals float to your mind, frozen in time
its like polaroid slides in motion, perfect photo design -
objects are formed by frequencies that voltage refined,
sparks connective lines, charged chemicals flowin inside
those that defied were manufactured broken & blind,
don't you really wanna know where you go when you die?
well, i should tell you - just hope it don't provoke suicide ..
the greatest show is your lives -
.. skull cam captures vision magically,
on a wide-screen stretched across the fabric of reality.
inhabiting a fallacy - your body was a harvested seed
in a computer game we're playing called 'The Garden of Eve'
My name is Adam Eden from Andromeda 3
Here's the truth, look beyond all logic, knowledge & read ……
.. started small, with a being that spawned multiple breeds
watched our creation start expanding at phenomenal speed
plugged a light source, the largest star we conceived
then put it all in rotation like we're sparkin' the weed! (ha..)
Ancients praised this light as holy, called it God & believed
it was their Father and it carved their world in almost a week,
created language, wrote a book observing astrological themes
then based their life on what it said - see how retarded it seems?
water & breeze are some prototypes belonging to me,
Every cell body, every breath - it's all a machine.
A marketing scheme only revealed when falling asleep
because it's all an extension of what you're calling a dream.
plotted clocks in between - placed the past before the present,
while the future's usually been determined by natural selection.
the patterns are protested .. only facts are your possessions
all claim to be greatest, none can travel through dimensions ……
fuck practicing discretion .. man's history is bytes in a system
He who feels disconnected holds the highest of wisdom,
physical frames a vehicle, and inside is the victim
that only holds its own perspective as to why it's imprisoned.
life's biorhythms are emitted, simply blips within a monitor
atmospheric attributes upon our digital thermometer
earthly experience is electric, you exist as an android
have you thought about your five senses from a physical standpoint?
it's chemical reactions caused by electrical spasms
allows your heart to pump juices through each ventricle passage
charges run, instantaneous, toward their mental attachments
& different sections trigger a different sets of senses to happen ……
can you grasp it?
open your eyes.
.. The brains capable of much, it leads a species to spread
coulda left the database alone, but we keep it instead
let the vital information rest, asleep in a bed -
and all the files are transmitted to the meat in your heads.
So quit praying for Heaven or any Jesus descent ..
the true home of your spirit is all you see when your dead.
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-Black
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light reflects, the solar aligns ..
transmitted signals float to your mind, frozen in time
its like polaroid slides in motion, perfect photo design -
objects are formed by frequencies that voltage refined,
sparks connective lines, charged chemicals flowin inside
those that defied were manufactured broken & blind,
don't you really wanna know where you go when you die?
well, i should tell you - just hope it don't provoke suicide ..
the greatest show is your lives -
.. skull cam captures vision magically,
on a wide-screen stretched across the fabric of reality.
inhabiting a fallacy - your body was a harvested seed
in a computer game we're playing called 'The Garden of Eve'
My name is Adam Eden from Andromeda 3
Here's the truth, look beyond all logic, knowledge & read ……
.. started small, with a being that spawned multiple breeds
watched our creation start expanding at phenomenal speed
plugged a light source, the largest star we conceived
then put it all in rotation like we're sparkin' the weed! (ha..)
Ancients praised this light as holy, called it God & believed
it was their Father and it carved their world in almost a week,
created language, wrote a book observing astrological themes
then based their life on what it said - see how retarded it seems?
water & breeze are some prototypes belonging to me,
Every cell body, every breath - it's all a machine.
A marketing scheme only revealed when falling asleep
because it's all an extension of what you're calling a dream.
plotted clocks in between - placed the past before the present,
while the future's usually been determined by natural selection.
the patterns are protested .. only facts are your possessions
all claim to be greatest, none can travel through dimensions ……
fuck practicing discretion .. man's history is bytes in a system
He who feels disconnected holds the highest of wisdom,
physical frames a vehicle, and inside is the victim
that only holds its own perspective as to why it's imprisoned.
life's biorhythms are emitted, simply blips within a monitor
atmospheric attributes upon our digital thermometer
earthly experience is electric, you exist as an android
have you thought about your five senses from a physical standpoint?
it's chemical reactions caused by electrical spasms
allows your heart to pump juices through each ventricle passage
charges run, instantaneous, toward their mental attachments
& different sections trigger a different sets of senses to happen ……
can you grasp it?
open your eyes.
.. The brains capable of much, it leads a species to spread
coulda left the database alone, but we keep it instead
let the vital information rest, asleep in a bed -
and all the files are transmitted to the meat in your heads.
So quit praying for Heaven or any Jesus descent ..
the true home of your spirit is all you see when your dead.
whole thing was dope bro.. flow was perfect... multis were all over.. not forced though.. held your schemes for a good amount of time.. lyrically above average.. gettin deep into the thinking with your work... worded well.. vocab was nice.. good piece here bro.. really well put together..
RTF on my piece i have up bro
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none of yall 56 people got shit to say huh .. smh
last time i'ma post in here.
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Stay, bro.
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Originally Posted by
D'Gawdian Black.
open your eyes.
light reflects, the solar aligns ..
transmitted signals float to your mind, frozen in time
its like polaroid slides in motion, perfect photo design -
objects are formed by frequencies that voltage refined,
sparks connective lines, charged chemicals flowin inside
those that defied were manufactured broken & blind,
Extremely, extremely sharp imagery. Starts off by describing technology, an important aspect of human life. I really don't know why people aren't posting here. The first three bars really caught my attention.
Quote:
Originally Posted by
D'Gawdian Black.
My name is Adam Eden from Andromeda 3
Here's the truth, look beyond all logic, knowledge & read ……
I really like how you tied up all of the lines before this bar by saying that you were describing life's processes. After this line, the whole piece became much more clear. The bar by itself is extremely ill, too.
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Originally Posted by
D'Gawdian Black.
A marketing scheme only revealed when falling asleep
because it's all an extension of what you're calling a dream.
You know that you're a good writer when others can immediately grasp what the hell you're saying and what you mean. Made me think of how I reflect on the day right before I go to bed, and how sometimes I just realize that I've been fucked over or what something someone said meant, etc. Powerful shit.
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Originally Posted by
D'Gawdian Black.
plotted clocks in between - placed the past before the present,
while the future's usually been determined by natural selection.
I think this bar just ties up everything about the "no God" concept. Bars like these really helped your piece stay together.
Quote:
Originally Posted by
D'Gawdian Black.
have you thought about your five senses from a physical standpoint?
it's chemical reactions caused by electrical spasms
allows your heart to pump juices through each ventricle passage
charges run, instantaneous, toward their mental attachments
& different sections trigger a different sets of senses to happen ……
can you grasp it?
open your eyes.
And that was the greatest shit I've read in a while. Amazing finish to the verse, tying everything up in the entire fucking piece. The repetition of "open your eyes" made spine chills run down, too.
All in all, great shit. I feel that you digressed during the "no God" part, and that most of it was filler. The filler accounted for the length of the piece. But seriously, this was the most introspective piece I've read in a while.
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no i meant in this thread .. which i just fucked up anyway
but thanks man.
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reserved for feed, i'll do some indepth ish on this later.
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this piece is sick -ill respond heavier 2maro.. not feeling like it right now, seyance -you fag, stfu
light reflects, the solar aligns ..
transmitted signals float to your mind, frozen in time
its like polaroid slides in motion, perfect photo design -
objects are formed by frequencies that voltage refined,
sparks connective lines, charged chemicals flowin inside
those that defied were manufactured broken & blind,
don't you really wanna know where you go when you die?
well, i should tell you - just hope it don't provoke suicide ..
^^^^ sick line dood, lol. loved that in particualr
the greatest show is your lives -
.. skull cam captures vision magically,
on a wide-screen stretched across the fabric of reality.
this whole sequence here, dope man.. deep as shyt and rhymed excellently. not much i would change
inhabiting a fallacy - your body was a harvested seed
in a computer game we're playing called 'The Garden of Eve'
My name is Adam Eden from Andromeda 3
Here's the truth, look beyond all logic, knowledge & read ……
lol, sick start off ..loving it
.. started small, with a being that spawned multiple breeds
watched our creation start expanding at phenomenal speed
nice rhyme scheme, good way to kick it off here
plugged a light source, the largest star we conceived
then put it all in rotation like we're sparkin' the weed! (ha..)
nasty, love this lol
Ancients praised this light as holy, called it God & believed
it was their Father and it carved their world in almost a week,
sick, brilliant imagery
created language, wrote a book observing astrological themes
then based their life on what it said - see how retarded it seems?
lol, ok cool
water & breeze are some prototypes belonging to me,
Every cell body, every breath - it's all a machine.
nice concept
A marketing scheme only revealed when falling asleep
because it's all an extension of what you're calling a dream.
wow, interesting idea. love it
plotted clocks in between - placed the past before the present,
while the future's usually been determined by natural selection.
hmmmm. ok
the patterns are protested .. only facts are your possessions
all claim to be greatest, none can travel through dimensions ……
indeed, bursted bubbles
fuck practicing discretion .. man's history is bytes in a system
He who feels disconnected holds the highest of wisdom,
lmao, nice.. kind of on some matrix shyt right there -as far as being disconnected
physical frames a vehicle, and inside is the victim
that only holds its own perspective as to why it's imprisoned.
life's biorhythms are emitted, simply blips within a monitor
atmospheric attributes upon our digital thermometer
nice, love the vocab in this series here. brilliant choice of words, timed perfect as well
earthly experience is electric, you exist as an android
have you thought about your five senses from a physical standpoint?
lol, wow.. nice thought
it's chemical reactions caused by electrical spasms
allows your heart to pump juices through each ventricle passage
lmfao!!, loving the vocab man -your imagery is nasty bro
charges run, instantaneous, toward their mental attachments
& different sections trigger a different sets of senses to happen ……
can you grasp it?
you just murdered this whole verse man, sick -flows nasty, ideas are sharp. and vocab is sick
open your eyes.
.. The brains capable of much, it leads a species to spread
coulda left the database alone, but we keep it instead
let the vital information rest, asleep in a bed -
and all the files are transmitted to the meat in your heads.
So quit praying for Heaven or any Jesus descent ..
the true home of your spirit is all you see when your dead.
fucking dope
man, this piece is what the site needs more of. unfortunately i havnt dropped anything of this callibre for a loooong time lmfao. kinda just got away from really thinking shyt through i guess. but all praises due here man, this had it all -good flow, sick vocab, the vividry was on point the whole way -had a lot of creativeity in this piece that really made stop and think about what you were saying -the whole concept you grasped here was dope as fuck man, bravo ---this is beyound HOF material.. keep rocking
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dropped a more thorough response ---^^^^^^^^^^^^^check it
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thanks homie. foreal ..
means a lot
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open your eyes.
light reflects, the solar aligns ..
transmitted signals float to your mind, frozen in time
its like polaroid slides in motion, perfect photo design -
Real nice start, flow is pretty much perfect not repetitive at all. Imagery was dope too I got the exact image you were tryna put across. Everything is on point and relevent in the next couple lines too.
those that defied were manufactured broken & blind,
don't you really wanna know where you go when you die?
well, i should tell you - just hope it don't provoke suicide ..
the greatest show is your lives -
.. skull cam captures vision magically,
I loved the question you asked, really brought me into the piece. Digging this whole camera/television screen vibe that you carry onto the next section too. Keeping everything so vibrant keeps you connected with the feeling, I've had this whole grainy 70's projection going in my head.. then you brought it up to date with the wide-screen and computer game, made me go through a whole like speeding up time before me thing.
Now the next bits starting, I really see where your going.. reminds me of my 'evolution of evil' piece with the whole adam and eve shit.
plugged a light source, the largest star we conceived
then put it all in rotation like we're sparkin' the weed!
This was piff.. no pun, everything was relevent and imagery through it was real nice and then the simile kept it interesting and added a funny element. But it still worked perfectly with the topic and flow.
water & breeze are some prototypes belonging to me,
Every cell body, every breath - it's all a machine.
A marketing scheme only revealed when falling asleep
because it's all an extension of what you're calling a dream.
Are you serious, I loved this section.. the whole imagery running through it was a perfect metaphor. The links between were smooth and worked brilliantly, how your portraying the human existance as like a program in a computer is so well thought out. Kinda on some Tron shit, if you get what i'm saying.
while the future's usually been determined by natural selection.
truth, tell 'em.. well worded too.
man's history is bytes in a system
He who feels disconnected holds the highest of wisdom,
Liked that, kind've saying who ever is the most enlightened.. not held down by the parameters of anything with more of a free reign to think and feel. Keeping the whole computer shit going makes this so much iller too.
Sorry but this is just my favourite shit right here..
earthly experience is electric, you exist as an android
have you thought about your five senses from a physical standpoint?
it's chemical reactions caused by electrical spasms
allows your heart to pump juices through each ventricle passage
charges run, instantaneous, toward their mental attachments
& different sections trigger a different sets of senses to happen ……
can you grasp it?
Pretty much the most cohesive mixture of story, rhyme scheme, imagery and pure dopeness I've seen in a while. If your other shit wasn't Legends, this could have exactly what that missed.
So quit praying for Heaven or any Jesus descent ..
the true home of your spirit is all you see when your dead.
Perfect way to end it all, finished on a great image and statement.
Oh yeah and wheres that verse for the collab at son!