32 and im ballin...

Om right Some shit huh
I look at this place now like it was duh
Im not bothered im just writing for this shit if you get me
But didnt see she wasnt a tree cause trip the real g
Gonna flip ya aint no mountain to climb
Its not like that yo you spitting trash on the mic
Nah aint like that rhymes got stacks
Land me something u aint even equipped with a jab
U so whack homie i aint like it cause its too easy
Okay u stupid fuck nobody wants to hear u or any of shitty ass cds
U so gay man go rap like a fiend trying to jump in this om piece
I was like you a french fry he was like nah shes from greece
This kid couldnt come up with a title
Im like reading the bible gotta keep them challengers stifled
Left em leaning like the tower in france kid so goddam eiffel
Fuck it in a while crocodile you whack like beargrylls gone wild
Yo quoting battles got some lines even used to jump in cyphers
It had to be told it wasnt a fuck up its just we keep babies in diapers
I guess u feel me better keep her tooshy pampered
Come on kid u such a child right dont expect me to believe this gangster
I got u hooked like cancer light me up u cant evem dwell on my pastures
U so whack u dont get it
This cat right here right is going look at me like what the fuck if u dont get it
Im not crazy man that dude right hmm looked like a good battle fuck
Guess i aint make the line up though guess the other cat right had better looks...



Right...

You’re quirky disses were really good... maybe a strength you can excel at and maybe a trade mark. Good read but some reduntants to your other pieces, maybe just a glitch of mine I hate to twice, ya know... but if you pay attention even the great greats repeat sometimes too. Just an intermediate beginner myself so just an opinion. I think you’re good but I also think you have capacity to do way better on writtens... how does it sound?

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Like is it already to a beat?

thanks nah this hasnt gone on a beat yet...

ya getting better
more verses like this