Lyrical Crisis

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...25#post3480525


yo this my first drop on the site. so peep it


Imagine~ vodka & ~gin~ smellin like ~jasmins~/
and that biggie & pac were just ~has beens~/
my ~rhymes are ~rough~ my ~mind~ is on ~self destruct~
~sinin~ in vegas so imma throw ~my chips in~/
~livin~ in the desert so call me ~egyptian~/
causin alot of ~trouble~ for ~crews~ like ~obstacles~/
everyday is a ~struggle~ so i~do~ smoke ~optimals~/
while bitches ~Shot They Load~ they ~Lock N Load~/
as Souls are ~Boxed & Sold~/


I got the lyrical ~tech nine~/
to persuade and ~infect minds~/
im quick to spit that ~hot shit~/
unlocking styles like a ~locksmith~/
lyrical crisis is the one i ~rock with~/
the crew and i are quick to ~blast at fools~/
for there money clips, ~cash and jewels~/
leavin mc's slain on the ~rappin news/
ya know we get the ~fetti right~/
fuck these ~pettie mics~/
swingin em like there sum ~deadly scythes~/
man im on the mic and only ~sixteen~/
like the ~water i ~keep clean~/
I ~slaughter~ and ~beat phines~/
just know this is the lyrical ~crisis~/
killin' mic ~devices~ and anything ~righteous~/


it still needs a chorus but i will let you be the judge of that....

uppin for feed

any feed would be deeply appreciated...

Alright..Multi's Crazy You Are...Get Rid Of The ~~~ I Use To Do That To It Really Fucks Your Structure Up Man..Vocabulary Was Decent Some Nice Shit You Used To Rhyme With Very Good For A Newbie Here Man...Wordplay Saw Some Okay Shit In Here..No Hate..Best Newbie I Saw In A While

tight man thanks for the detailed feed.