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Locked In The Chamber
[ Locked In The Chamber]
Im locked in the chamber
Anxiously waiting to make one suffer
After I depart my chamber
This mechanical piece will dispence in another member
Finally, my anxiety is calmed by the chambers only light
Or maybe it's better for me to escape this darker place at night
Eager to let loose and take path in natures air
I wonder what will I destroy to cause unexpected dispair
But those thoughts do not matter.. Why? because..
Im still locked in the chamber.
Early september, our master confronted a gang member
Fueld with rage he dropped his blunt, exposing its bright ember
Dont you remember master? Thats the person you sent Caliber after
Under your high, your prominent death became inflicted with laughter
As I felt my faith suddenly becoming a factor
Mechanicly I heared a click that drove my insanity faster
As I flew trough what seemed to be reality
I couldn't stop, for humans blood I was thirsty
Could it be my purpose was increase deaths statistical casualty?
Or was I here to test mand kinds fait trough their family?
Noticably, I took path towards the side walks concrete
As I crashed I flew again, but instead of swooshing I heared a heart beat
Master you shall forgive me, as your high impared your vision
And caused your aim to de-tour me and inflict your chest's insicion
Under my body a doctor will find my description
And discover that Intelligance is what the black mind is missin
But this doesn't mean this story is over,
because the gang member still has killers
Locked In The Chamber.
(Edited: Spelling Mistake)
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Still Uppin for feed.... last up post i shouldnt have to spam to get feed.
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use more multis.
combo rhymes are ill. utilize them. to me it felt like you left a lot wide open.
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uhm interesting pice, the first and last verses come accross with a poetic spirit and rythym.
i'd say maybe the lyrical parts could maybe do with internal rhymes to strengthen the flow.vocab was pretty decent...had some suspense which is good
ipretty nice tho.. you'd make a good poet also
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stay raising
pz
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ur strucure was off in a lotta places so it afffected the flow a lil bit.....it came out a lil worse....Could it be my purpose was increase deaths statistical casualty?
Or was I here to test mand kinds fait trough their family?
this is my favorite line.....ur internal rhyming was good in a cple places also.....jus keep on doin ur thing.....nice scheme to
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