Inevitable: Five

I had a dream about cutting wires
Or maybe a nightmare
About cutting wires..
or maybe not cutting wires
Everything's wireless nowadays..
haha
ha
That's really not that funny
I can't crack a smile
I'm getting more temporary by the second
with this pain..
..Which is why I'm confused about not cutting/cutting wires..

I could've been a salesman
I could've came here
and sold sunshine in a bottle
and I could've been a millionaire
But I guess money can't
buy you the incubation room
across the hall

Excuse me, madam, can I borrow some life?
I'm slowly slipping,
there's an abundance of life in this room
trust me, not everyone will need it
half of these monkey's will
have tasted PCP in ten years
or have alcohol in the veins
But
look at me
I'm a tree
I'm a leaf
I'm a slowly growing fruit
I've got a trunk that cares for me
And the cherry-picking reaper
Is coming for the ripest apple

Oh God
I could go for some music
Any music, even elevator music
But only if that elevator is
Heading up
and it's so cold without hope
Punxatowney Phil is never coming home
to his molehill in my soul
And seeing his shadow.. impossible
This isn't a molehill, it's a mountain mom
It's more than spilled milk
That's blood on the floor
And you need sun to see shadows
All I can see is with my mind
I'm on a highway headed to the horizon
And I'm not quite sure what's behind it
There's no traffic
My heads out the window
Playing frisbee with myself
There's no exits
I can't turn around
Just stare at a dark horizon
There's thunder clouds over there
And I'm terrified, it's raining over here

I'm drowsy
Or is it something else
I'm growing tired
A whole different level of tired
Tired of everything
I'm kind of all right.. back on the highway
Rainbows here now
Still thunder there
The car melted away while I was
back at my heart's hotel
And I'm just reclined in the car seat
Flying toward my *SLAM*
Here I am, nothing but black
Then white
Then black
Fluctuating colors, I'm in my own soul
I'm fading away
It doesn't matter anymore
This is the ultimate high
I wonder who God's dealer is?
Suddenly, everything happens again
Then
I'm gone.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6511297
Feed that Grandeza collaboration please?



This was a really dope piece, I'm nominating it for sure man. Your wording was really nice with every line. (every line settled in my mind fluently) Your creative with metaphores, and for some reason -- a lot of your lines reminded me of Atmosphere without the rhymescheme. Very interesting follow up with the topic at hand man. This was probally one of the more original poems I've read in a long time on this site. Of course, I've read some amazing poems, but this has to be the most original this year. Imagery was really fluent, I was dead set on the visuals at hand and you really had me re-introduced to my imagenation man. Emotion was also something that really carried well.. this was dope as fuck. Keep writin' the music.

This is a very 'not RB' poem... Not alot of rhyme, abstract, hip hop imagery. But very fricken solid.
You had ever device needed for an awesome poetry drop. The sentence structure was wording was very good. The irony within all the verse was amazing. The metephors used were equally as good.
It deserves atleast a nomination.... dope drop

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...rk-374217.html

thanks guys

Yeah I really liked a lot of lines in this poem, and the whole flow/topic of just your thoughts being presented back to back.. definately sick

ayo you