D.I.C. Rap

I guess somewhere I was an ass hat
I search to find true as set
I'm geek bitch and that's that
stereo typical you get laughed at
I flow you hoe al go rithmic hash that
calculate calculus you still ain't half that
free style key style subtract fact
get shot down quick strict 9 leave you as rat shit
fix code like I'm a ratchet write and split bars like I'm a hatchet
I'll add in an add-lid and get past it
your just a thick headed D.I.C. your a bastard
fuck I'm lit and drunk bitch I'm plastered
the way I fucked you with this rhyme I am sure that your ass hurts

This is from another forum D.I.C.
They erased my post..lmao

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...099/index.html
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...174/index.html

probably because you didnt leave any feedback links like you just did on this one

Hey thanks for the heads up I didn't realize Open Mic required feed I don't remember it being that way which is why I posted in this section as just a quick drop where I didn't have to find links. Uppin this was funny though they put my post back after reading this. My bad I was fucked up last night lmao

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I flow you hoe al go rithmic hash that
calculate calculus you still ain't half that

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This wasn't bad (if it's the word play I'm thinking it is). And it's cool to stay on 1 rhyme scheme the whole way through, but make sure you can definitely keep to it, because the more focus you put on the fact that you're rhyming with the same couple syllables, the more noticable it is when you come off it.

Other than that, it's not bad, the flow I feel from it is probably its strongest aspect. Keep going.

Reading this at first i was thinking what the fuck,,got into it a lil and started understanding som or ya lines. i would say in future do a longer piece and elevate a lil take more time and effort to make a better piece. coz ur flow says u can do better