Lock the door or suffer demise
be surprised if you see his eyes.
The soul will burn, you will die
lock the door, or don't you cry.
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Lock the door or suffer demise
be surprised if you see his eyes.
The soul will burn, you will die
lock the door, or don't you cry.
piece seems like a classic case of "face your fears" going off the last line. but the first three lines seemed to have made it clear that demise is part of not locking the door. it's a weird piece, far too short for my liking, and it just didn't sit well with me. you write better when it's lengthy... don't write like this man... it's like writing a hook to a verse as a poem. maybe it's me but it's just not that great to me.
- Nash
Wow.. I agree with Nash, man.. This is way too
short for my liking.. Nothing to it.. No emotion..
No nothing.. Just four lines.. Like a quote..
Sorry, man.. I just dont like it. Better luck next time..
just wanted to try the style. It's cool.