Nahlidge - happy valentines day
so i was peepin some writtens in the HoF - jus outta curiousity cuz i was bored, n nahl's - happy valentines day stuck out to me the most. I think this was pretty deep, emotional, n filled with imagery. Line structure was on point, flow was smooth, jus a overall deep piece in my honest opinion. vote yes n ill supply kool-aid n a years supplys worth of chicken....okay im kidding on that part but for reel, this deserves a spot. From a first persons point of view, readin this piece i felt pretty deep readin this.
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...113/index.html
Quote:
I used to stare, with intent to try and win her soul
Commend her so I could warm her thru the winter cold
Center folds, open up and show the shape of a heart
Erasin` the dark lonely nights, to replace with a spark
We`d jot I love you messages thru the course of the day
With a kiss to bid farewell, never force `er to stay
Porsche or a stage - coach, starry nights in the city
An embrace can so say much, we wouldn`t fight over silly
Things, and when life brings us that rare arguement
We`d know how to talk it out without losin` a part of this
Scars and nicks would only help us build a stronger support
So days apart would make me want, miss and long for your warmth
Caught in a storm, but these rain drops can hide our tears
Cuz the way you make me smile, it`s like I`ve cried for years
In light of fears, loneliness is now becomin` a stranger
So if Cupid missed, I hope he`s keepin` one in the chamber
He used to stare, with intent to try and win her soul
Commend her so he could warm her thru the winter cold
Center folds, open up and show the shape of a room
Fadin` the tunes of lost love, now replacin` the tomb
With a 40 acre mansion, dancin`, chancin` his stride
Two left feet become a tango, now he stands with a pride
Live enough to climb Fiji, or swim the Atlantic
Makin` it hard for her to truly say he isn`t the answer
To the on goin` question she`s been askin` herself
Ever since the first hug, the strongest passion she`s felt
Laughin`, she tells her best friend about this guy she met
About his tender cute smile, about his eyes, the sex
The long goodbye kisses, the walks and the flowers
The way he stays on the phone at night, talkin` for hours
The connect the dots with stars, as he draws her name
And how bein` apart hurts her, the scars, the pain
She used to stare, with intent on playin` hard to get
Like that night, when she met him at the bar and left
Without askin` him his name, without a number exchange
Without a "nice to meet you", it must`ve run him insane
Reason bein`, experience showed men are one in the same
But first impressions made her think maybe some of `em change
