For the Record.

I generate heat with Rhymes I pack lighters
Incenerate the beat watch my lines back fire
See me torchin attire cummin hot to burn rubbers
scorchin brighter than the sun lip locked like twin lovers
give cock to 10 mothers, send shock the kids stutter
Straight out the country like crock, I spread butter.
Ain't no future sorry flow hit your drains like grease
Not even Super Mario get more game than these
Ima pimp. Ima G, to the highest degree
be like SAT's get embarassed when you test me
Not prestidge Ivy League,
just kryptique and mystique
if spirits write lyrics then Im six feet deep ughhhhhhhhh!!!!


This is the start of a new song, so tell me how bad it sucks.


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Originally Posted by M-Phantom

I generate heat with Rhymes I pack lighters
Incenerate the beat watch my lines back fire
See me torchin attire cummin hot to burn rubbers
scorchin brighter than the sun lip locked like twin lovers
give cock to 10 mothers, send shock the kids stutter
Straight out the country like crock, I spread butter.
Ain't no future sorry flow hit your drains like grease
Not even Super Mario get more game than these
Ima pimp. Ima G, to the highest degree
be like SAT's get embarassed when you test me
Not prestidge Ivy League,
just kryptique and mystique
if spirits write lyrics then Im six feet deep ughhhhhhhhh!!!!


This is the start of a new song, so tell me how bad it sucks.


http://www.myspace.com

http://www.dictionary.com

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"..watch my lines back fire" that line can be taken by some more ways then one.


"Ima pimp. Ima G, to the highest degree
be like SAT's get embarassed when you test me"
^the last bit confused me.

aside from that you had some cute lines
nothing that made me go wow
my honest opinion since this is going in a song

but you had a nice flow and a good presentation

keep ups!

rtf is you plz: Left

The flow was good, man... But the multi's need some work. I mean, for the most part, it was okay... Seen worse from newbies.. I wish ya luck on this track, man... Sorry for such a short feed, but im mad tired... Its time I go rest my neck... Get some sleep, ya know.... -un0

does anyone have any suggestions? What lines did you like, and what should I take out. What were the weaker parts you didn't care for.

Im up for critques. Throw in some ideas.

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