Open Mic Chat

^ It's kinda like a two for one deal. Write one, you get one back.

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Originally Posted by 'phX

I just post for Emily's feedback(s) and its like fishing for diamonds...

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ahhh, you're a star lol

cool to also read you in pc 'phX

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I know I've got om's that need to be fed.
Time ran away with me last night.
Johnny and I spent some time together .....

**does the moonwalk with his hof award stuffed down his pants**

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Originally Posted by SELF ACTIVATE

A question to all...

What's the best piece you've ever written and why?

Links encouraged.

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http://rapbattles.com/showthread.php...=the+strangler

One of my favorite pieces i wrote i dropped about 9 years agoo here dark tale

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Originally Posted by Emily

regarding 'I versus Me' it didn't get the feed it should have, and really wasn't a pc drop but as you say, should have been put into om. Juke and I weren't modding back then, but I've talked to Jukon and he's given me the green light to allow you to drop that piece into om when and if you feel you'd like to do that. I'd like you to do that. It was a good piece that should have had more feed and I think it's because it was in pc that it really didn't get the chance it needed.

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Awesome. I shall definitely take the opportunity to do that. Thanks to you and @Jukon for the green light!

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Originally Posted by TheIllyricist

'Our Quiet Raven'. I wish it got more attention than it did, but I did get absolutely excellent feed from Emily and Sammy and for that I will thank them a million times over. Perhaps it was too long for people to feed properly, idk. But, to me it had some of my best word placement, word choice, imagery, layers of meaning with metaphors. It's a bit of a tribute to Edgar Allan Poe, but at the same time it's still my own work. An exploration of the darkness of the human condition, life and death, our obsession with knowing things we might not need to know through the paths of our life. It's in the Poetry section, so I guess it doesn't really go with the OM world. Here's the link anyway! http://www.rapbattles.com/showthread...ur-Quiet-Raven

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This poem has been slept on. As a fellow fan of Poe, I'll definitely check it out and offer some feedback.

I'll get around to reading and feeding in a bit

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@Jukon ...I already fed your pieces but, I'll read it again. I remember it for being really relatable. I was impressed at how accurately you captured those thoughts that we all think and translated them into written form. Every line was in sync with the one before And after it. It just all fit and fell into place perfectly. It was just smoothly worded and laid out. The real skill was in how you made It seem so effortless when we all know It probably took a minute just trying to figure out how to lace it. It was really an epic piece bro.

Here's my choice: Her Gnostic Gospel

I wrote this piece as part of the June Writer of the Month Contest.

The reason I feel like it is probably my best work is because I didn't really write it -- she did. It's like everything I wanted to say about her just flowed through me. I didn't even have to think about it. Every line meant something. Every stanza had depth and was layered. I could break it all down. More impressively, I still find new meaning in it every time I read it. Ultimately, I Just feel like it was a complete story. It was enthralling and mysterious. And, I didn't cheat myself or the reader -- I feel it was a full expirence . It was exactly what I wanted to be. If that makes sense...?

Why was my piece closed

It's open

anyone wanna quick collab?

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Originally Posted by idealizt

This poem has been slept on. As a fellow fan of Poe, I'll definitely check it out and offer some feedback.

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I'd appreciate that. I'll check out yours and return the favor.

this is an oldie, not my favourite, but still makes me smile

http://rapbattles.com/showthread.php...he-Death-of-Me

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Originally Posted by SELF ACTIVATE

Here's my choice: Her Gnostic Gospel

I wrote this piece as part of the June Writer of the Month Contest.

The reason I feel like it is probably my best work is because I didn't really write it -- she did. It's like everything I wanted to say about her just flowed through me. I didn't even have to think about it. Every line meant something. Every stanza had depth and was layered. I could break it all down. More impressively, I still find new meaning in it every time I read it. Ultimately, I Just feel like it was a complete story. It was enthralling and mysterious. And, I didn't cheat myself or the reader -- I feel it was a full expirence . It was exactly what I wanted to be. If that makes sense...?

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I remember reading this. It's beautiful.

"I thought this was good, maybe my favorite "As one man's inspiration is another's destruction She can raise a living nation as easily as deduct one."

"This is really great, also I like the image and colors. "crafted in hate with a magical taste for fantastical space".

@cz, thank you so much for dropping in om, and for leaving links. However, this feed here, (which is for two pieces)...well...lol...you get it right? A little more insight from you would be greatly appreciated.
We all want quality feed on our pieces.
With that in mind, we should leave the type of feed for others, that we'd like others, to leave for us.
One and a half lines, with half of that being a quote, doesn't cut it.
So dig a little deeper my friend, that way,
others will dig deeper when feeding your written work too.
We're always checking for quality feed.
A few more genuine thoughts on those two pieces would be appreciated.

tiny feed indicates a tiny penis

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Originally Posted by 'phX

tiny feed indicates a tiny penis

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lol, I concur.