#47

The disco of madness
is where you flirt with fear
and laugh at folly tricks
and eat the pie in the
faces of the figure
that scares the children
half to death
or half from life
as they choke on cotton candy
and singe their genetics
by the fire which man spit with rancid breath
that intertwined with the fecal matter
the dancing elephant planted
for the twirling girlies to pirouette
amongst the musical mayhem
of the bearded woman who sings
the high notes caught in mid air
by acrobats trusting their lives in
blistered hands feeding the
lion who bit the whip
that lacerated the hind end of the
oriental pretzel men and women
who fold the jokers dealt to them so
they can reveal the royal flush
of the ringmasters face that
pukes in his top-to-bottom hat whilst being
dazzled by the snow globe traveled
by 1, count 'em 2
3,4,5,6 motorcycles racing over death
like the road less traveled and
the fumes intoxicate the clown once again
so he babbles horrible jokes to entertain
millions who are petrified of his stereotyped costume
that shoots poisoned water from the black rose
that was plucked from the awkward garden of
the harriest man alive
whos fleas itch his thoughts conjuring dreams of skin disease
itchy scratchy, itchy scratchy, his finger blends with those
pointing at his abnormal life
so he blasts the human firery-cannonball
into the flocks of pointing fingers
and they die
and they die
while
the lights flash around
now they all come back alive
just to prove he didn't knock the crowd dead
as they sing
"Na Na Na Na,
Na Na Na Na,
Hey Hey Hey,
Goodbye"
and the clowns
ringmasters' frown goes upside down
flipping with the acrobats now
falling into the lions cage
swarming with motorcycles
around the bearded lady again on high
scaring the elephant on to a pie
that squirts and kills the inferno breath
so the twirling girlies stop to show care
But The Show Must Go On!
Paranoia
Paranoia in the Disco of madness where
an electrical outtage..................
Awe struck is the audience who is never speechless,
ENCORE!

good drop

this was koo...you and your damn abstract pieces damnit...lmfao...nice man i liked it alot cus it was like i was placed into the time and situation given and i felt like it was nicely ssorted amongst such criteria such as content, wording, structure, emotino, metaphors and multies...nicely assorted i may say again!...nothing was ever cramped into one such stanza ya know it had a element of each criteria in each stanza ya know...it was koo reading this..the first thing that popped on up was roll bounce..lmfao i had a picture of roll bounc ein my head through this whole piece...lol
well dude nice drop and nice emotion i really liked this as a personal FAV. keep it up dude!.

RTF on the link in the sig.

This was an abnormally good piece man. I mean it had a weird vibe strung in here and I felt it was about a circus, just the abstract view of things and I feel that you executed the theme well man. It was a pretty interesting piece in my vision, and just the in you face swing of things and the pessimistic mood made it seem even better with the dark swing of things. I liked this man, it seemed like a mildly but not overdone abstract style. I like your use of vocabulary, even though I laughed so hard at "fecal matter", but it wasn't meant to be a joke or anything. It was nevertheless a good drop, just a stretched view of things man, it was pretty dope and I liked this. This seems like kind of my writing style, and I liked the added features and content in here. It definitely wasn't your best, but it lived up to my expectations as a pretty good and advanced read. I didn't really get what the title had to do with the piece or anything, but it was like an added mystery to slip that in and I liked how you added the account of just making the reader thing in this piece man. Overall, good job.

Thanks for the look dude.. and The title has nothing to do with the piece.. If I don't think of or want a title for a piece, I number it.. this is the 47th piece that has no title... and I dropped one like a couple months ago titled 46.. All poems in between those two had titles.

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yea i know....lol...i remeber you telling me about that in WV chat room...