SBE (UNTITLED 2014) PROD BY CHEMIST

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https://soundcloud.com/techomega/tec...-untitled-2014


(BRUCE LEE AUDIO INTERVIEW)

VERSE
CAN I PAINT A PICTURE A STORY FILLED WITH GOOD AND EVIL//
PUT THE BLACK ON WHITE RAP LIFE AND WRITE WITH A NEEDLE//
GOD INJECTED ME! THE WORLD DISRESPECTED ME AND NEGLECTED ME...//
TIMES MOVING AND IT'S NOT A SECOND G//
TO FLASH AND REWIND IT BACK. SO I RHYME AND FADE TO BLACK//
BUTTER FINGERS STICK TO OPIONS SHORTIES IM MADE OF FACTS//
MADE OF SCRATCH MADE OF TATS MADE TO RAP//
MADE TO SCRAP BLACK JEANS IT'S A FACT THAT MY GENES IS BLACK//
FRESH DRESSING SINCE ADOLESCENE//
ROAD BRAWLS WITH CLOSE CALLS. THANK GOD FOR MANY BLESSINGS/
GOD HAD TO HOLD A n*gga. POPS HAD TO MOLD A n*gga//
LIFE HAD TO SHOW A n*gga. WHY MY BROS ON COKE n*gga//
WHO'S LYING? IN LOVE WITH SOMEONE WHO IS DYING//
IN MORE WAYS THEN ONE! DEAR LORD SAVE YOUR SON!//
LONELY IN MY MISERY WELL DRAKE SAID TO, "TAKE CARE"//
CAN I BE LIKE RICK ROSS OR CAN WE HAVE A GREAT YEAR?//
TWENTY SEVEN YEARS OF LIFE. RIDDLES ON THE WALL//
WHY IS FAM DISTANT AND FRIENDS THEY NEVER CALL//
AT AH EARLY AGE I COULD HEAR MY PEOPLES FILLED WITH RAGE//
IREMEMBER WAKING UP...HEARING FIGHTS SHAKING UP//
SHAKIN UP. FEELIN LIKE I'M LOST IN THE WORLD//
ON THE DOT. LIKE HERBIE HANCOCK LOST IN THIS WORLD//
MY MIND FEELIN HIP-HPOP JAZZ FIVE YEARS OLD//
BORN YEAR LATER AFTER TRIBE KICKED THAT FLOW//
YOU SEE ME?YOU SEE ME ARE YOU HEARING ME CLOSE?//
LIFE WAS GOOD OH YEAH THE FEELING WAS GOLD//
I USE TO SMACK MY HEAD AROUND. YOU NOT KNOWIN MY PAIN//
SEVEN POUNDS. SEVEN ROUNDS. POUNDS OF FAME//
CAUSE I COULD GET IT. HEAR BEAT RIP IT AND I MIGHT FLIP IT//
YOUNG MAESTRO. LEONARDO WITH A MIC BRO//
PICTURE THIS. PICTURE THAT. SO I PICTURED MY LIFE YO//
THINK A PICTURE. PAINT A THOUGHT. AND MY BRUSH IS MY BIBLE//
HOPING TO MYSELF LORD JESUS I NEED A PLACE THERE//
GOD AND A FACE THERE ALL LOVE NO HATE THERE//
LIFE GOT REAL IN BALTIMORE SO WE LEFT THE HOOD//
TWENTY TWO YEARS LATER WERE STILL FAR FROM GOOD//
LET ME TALK TO THEM WORLD CAN I PAINT A PICTURE//
VENOMOUS THOUGHTS THAT HIT YA LIKE BOA CONSTRICTOR//
TAKE A STROLL ON THE AVE DOWN THROUGH MEMORY LANE//
ARE HEARING ME PAIN? I CAN'T CLEAR DEE RAIN//
ALL THESE EVIL THOUGHTS THAT TRANSFORM DEEP IN ME BRAIN//
IT'S ALOT OF THOUGHTS AND HEARTS THAT'S FILLED WITH RAGE//
LIKE TWO FIENS WITH NO CRACK LOCKED IN A CAGE//
TAKE A JOURNEY SHORTY LEMME FLIP THE PAGE//

This is cool. Nice beat I like you flow. Nice lyrics in there too. You rhyme structure is good, you make good use of internal rhyme. You got good presence over the beat, your voice fits nicely. You could improve you enunciation a little, but mostly this is good.
Nice work bro, keep it up.
Hit me back
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...beatz)-Laganto

I quite liked it, good beat, u flowed well.

liked these lyrics

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LIFE GOT REAL IN BALTIMORE SO WE LEFT THE HOOD//
TWENTY TWO YEARS LATER WERE STILL FAR FROM GOOD//
LET ME TALK TO THEM WORLD CAN I PAINT A PICTURE//
VENOMOUS THOUGHTS THAT HIT YA LIKE BOA CONSTRICTOR//
TAKE A STROLL ON THE AVE DOWN THROUGH MEMORY LANE//
ARE HEARING ME PAIN? I CAN'T CLEAR DEE RAIN//

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keep at it

Welcome back amigo.

Love the chill vibe in the beat...it's echoed in your delivery. Unique voice IMO. Flow's nice, schemes are cool. Big focus on the lyrics obviously. I'm really diggin this...really nice piece here, bro! Good shit

Get back at my FV entry when you can! http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ats-Contest-VI

okay, i like the beat, very laid back, melodic. it's dope. the lyrics were cool, my only complaint here is your rhyme pattern is a little basic so at times it comes off as elementary. other than that though, pretty good.