20 lines..
topic..snakes in the sea..
good luck..due on december 29th 2018..good luck..
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20 lines..
topic..snakes in the sea..
good luck..due on december 29th 2018..good luck..
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Sea of Snakes
seas of snakes, seep the day, sea the day, release the waves
appease the gates, you conjure the black magic when you meditate
prosper as a serpent, spit pray and hold dominion to darkness
we have the cleverness and wit'; to hold the soul of a Garden
Fold the jargon, release waves upon waves of glistening' water
you are the conjure to black magic; a liquidious satyr
insidious matyr; precious from above; sinister brilliance
we have the prayers to hold sanctuary during a ministers wishes
fellowship of the swear land; the serpent of Eazen prospers in prosperity
we hold Dios's word as truth; our morality holds prosperity and peace
we have the conjure of black magic; for the green envious of man
For our good morals, and ideals hold zealousness in plan
peace, and prosperity flourish our people with abundant joy
we gasp a speech from our liquidious alabaster tongue; and the sun has a voice
satyr of heaven; satyr of light; breathe peace and prosperity for joy
for we are good people, with good morality in choice
serpents conjure wishes and prayers for the voice of reason
devils and angels bring forth burning swords, we are the conjure of demons
suns of gods, bring forth water and rain; we sea the way
for as we see god's waters, we spit pray; and swim with the seas of snakes
I’ll have mine tomorrow
Snakes in the Sea
On the yacht dashing down the turquoise, crashing waves drowning out every decible of her voice
I shoulda known to separate my girl from my boys..
when you get betrayed it’s usually cause you didn’t have a choice
Who knew that flip cup would turn into dick suck? Who’d a thought battle shots would be why she sat on cocks?
I had to man the ship! I couldn’t keep an eye on the guy with the wandering eye, wide sigh from the opening of Janellas thigh
9 in hand...I’m a prideful man, one move n that nine will blam
One poetic shot is all it’ll take to wash that hoe away like when the tide meets sand
To be continued soon.. just wanna show you that I have some lines
Snakes in the Sea
The ale from my mason jar swished around with a bubble... ok....
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It was a cold night on the yacht maned by my long time rival
Fit for survival? I split Jit Dillinger like the day he is for no showing the final
R. Kelly - are you chasing the pee? Kobe Bryant, young pussy slayin for me
Twin beers or bears? Pubic hairs, burn it off with nair. Nope not your face crease
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Pilgrimage, BON VOYAGE with my entourage through a looking glass
Fish with a boule in it, why does my glass look like sour patch kids in ass
Not nice, @Not N Nice who’s wait? Not for grabs keep eating slabs
Gonna need ext until the morning
You have till 11:59 pst tonight to drop a complete verse or you get the dqQuote:
Originally Posted by Pilgrimage
Stop fucking around
Ok... I would do bar for bar breakdown. But its a Topical battle so I'll give categories.
Flow: Pilgrim , I could read his weird transitions a bit more clearly. Sin, you had a steady flow but also stalled with a few pauses in between.
Topic/Theme: Tie, I enjoyed both for what its worth. Even though Pilgrim was on some other type time including awkward references.
Emotion: Sin, gets this category more easier just because his content gave relevance. I didn't really grasp too much emotion from Pilgrims just straight hardcore points. Though with that being said it didn't draw enough emotion for me as a reader.
Vocabulary: Sin, had a more concrete style to present. Pilgrim, I liked yours too. Just a few simple words with riddles that didn't form so easily.
Imagery:Tie, I believe both had a decent amount of concepts. Just not enough to override the next mans mindset. One or two good lines from both I enjoyed reading.
Creativity: Pilgrim , even though it was a tie with the imagery. Those one or two lines had some creative depth to them. Sin almost had a good perception in the beginning but didn't utilize the rest correctly.
Overall: I think this was a cool read from both writers. But I have to edge this victory to, Pilgrim slightly more. He barely edged this with his weird ass transitions... So random. His first section kinda saved him. Good read tho nonetheless..
Merged Pilgrimage's post into one. upping for votes
Pil leads 1-0