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this dude couldnt 'TALKSLICK' if he was conversating with CANCER
after this he gonna ride me harder then STRIP DANCERS
BRING all ya PREWRITES to the BATTLE TONIGHT
like it really matters im NICE
look down on you like im flowing from SATELITES
Dawg, you need to spit least 10 lines, so fix that up and I'mma key now..
In my callout I did say 5 bars.. A bar is equal to 2 lines, guess your new.. Fix up your verse and I'll drop mine..
this dude changed rules after i spit so heres a longer verse for the 5 bars
this dude couldnt 'TALKSLICK' if he was conversating with CANCER(1*)
after this he gonna ride me harder then STRIP DANCERS
BRING all ya PREWRITES to the BATTLE TONIGHT
like it really matters im NICE
look down on you like im flowing from SATELITES
you can never SHINE
ya whole persona like a SHATTERED LIGHT
you not EMINEM nobody gonna listen to YOU
even if you is a drug using whiteboy from MICHIGAN TOO(2*)
ya whole shit garbage you like OSCAR THE GROUCH
so play like a basketball little nigga and BOUNCE
*Shakes head*
I didn't change the rules idiot, your just clueless.. The callout was called 5 bars dumbass.. Anyway,,
Check it..
•Your whack still, guess I can only summon my rage..
•Got twice the skill, and your almost 'double my age'!!*
•Like a 'comb through hair', this batt is being 'parted'..
•Needs to be in 'prison', dun even know what a 'bar' is!!*
*Brushes the dirt & gets ready to murder this kid*
•I 'eat mcs' like him, usin my 'savage bars for meals'..
•I'll fuckin 'blow him up' like his 'avatar were real'!!*
•I'mma just 'grindin you up' like I do with a 'buster'..
•Spits couldn't be 'on spot' if you was a 'Hustler'!!*
•Cuz like a 'hand of poker' this bitch just 'got dealt'..
•2 chances on a verse, yet ya still got 'knocked out'!!*
aight....
TheGhettosShakes
this dude couldnt 'TALKSLICK' if he was conversating with CANCER(1*)
after this he gonna ride me harder then STRIP DANCERS
^^man, the first line is probably the most played concept in a battle man.
second line was pretty weak, but not too bad.
BRING all ya PREWRITES to the BATTLE TONIGHT
like it really matters im NICE
^^ filler
look down on you like im flowing from SATELITES
you can never SHINE
ya whole persona like a SHATTERED LIGHT
very weak man, werent feelin that @ all.
you not EMINEM nobody gonna listen to YOU
even if you is a drug using whiteboy from MICHIGAN TOO(2*)
^^anuva filler
ya whole shit garbage you like OSCAR THE GROUCH
so play like a basketball little nigga and BOUNCE
weak again man, u cuda re-worded the first line to make it hit harder, second line was terrible.
Talksick
Your whack still, guess I can only summon my rage..
Got twice the skill, and your almost 'double my age'!!*
Nice personal man.
Like a 'comb through hair', this batt is being 'parted'..
Needs to be in 'prison', dun even know what a 'bar' is!!*
origional first line, second line is kinda played, but another nice personal.
I 'eat mcs' like him, usin my 'savage bars for meals'..
I'll fuckin 'blow him up' like his 'avatar were real'!!
didnt understand this, i get the feelin the dude changed his avi since?
if he did, thats a bitch move "TheGhettosShakes"
I'mma just 'grindin you up' like I do with a 'buster'..
Spits couldn't be 'on spot' if you was a 'Hustler'!!*
kinda weak man, werent feelin it
Cuz like a 'hand of poker' this bitch just 'got dealt'..
2 chances on a verse, yet ya still got 'knocked out'!!*
first line is played, second line was a weak filler. not a very good finisher man.
aight, as ya may have guessed, ima go wiv Talksick on this, most of his lines we good, except near the end, dunno wot happened.
anyway..... will sum1 vote on my battle (link in my sig) thanx.
And yeah, he did make the bitch move and changed his avy.. It used to be a grenade dawg..
Anyways, 1-0 ^^
weak battle.......
The ghettoshakes.... came weak, such as in your second bar "like it matters im nice", alot of your lines were played, your opener tried a shot at his name but just came played and and your closer "play like a basketball and bounce" was wack. The only decent line i could see that coulda been happening for you was the Eminem/Michigan bar, attempted personal, but just didnt land hard.
Talksick... opener was decent personal, nothing special. The Prison/Bar line is played but it landed for a nice personal. Tried talkin about his Avy which i guess was the grenade but he changed it, but neway, that bar was weak. Hustler bar was weak. Your closer came played, esp. the poker/dealt line.
In the end both came a little played, no multis, both had ok structure and flow, but talksick came better with some personals that hit and GS came with some wack lines and punches that didnt hit.
2-0 Up^^
Thx for the votes so far, much appreciation..
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Ghettoshakes, wasnt feelin your verse man. I didnt find any of your lines to hit hard. Sorry.
Talksick, you had some good punches, a few played lines, but overall your verse was better man.
Vote-Talk
Uhh, you didn't poll your vote godamnit!
O well..
Last uppin^^!!!!
ghetto- u didnt know what a bar was that was pretty wack, u didnt have one good punch in there
talksick- you had some good punches, took this battle pretty easily
v/ talksick
this dude couldnt 'TALKSLICK' if he was conversating with CANCER(1*)
after this he gonna ride me harder then STRIP DANCERS
first line, obvious and played, second weren't bad
BRING all ya PREWRITES to the BATTLE TONIGHT
like it really matters im NICE
filler
look down on you like im flowing from SATELITES
you can never SHINE
ya whole persona like a SHATTERED LIGHT
dont rhyme 3 lines, all the sylables of the last word of the first line should rhyme (satellites and shine, badly rhymed)
you not EMINEM nobody gonna listen to YOU
even if you is a drug using whiteboy from MICHIGAN TOO(2*)
this line didn't hit hard
ya whole shit garbage you like OSCAR THE GROUCH
so play like a basketball little nigga and BOUNCE
not feeling the first line, needs rewording, second line is lame, the homophone/phonic is weak.
•Your whack still, guess I can only summon my rage..
•Got twice the skill, and your almost 'double my age'!!*
nice internal rhymes, good personal
•Like a 'comb through hair', this batt is being 'parted'..
•Needs to be in 'prison', dun even know what a 'bar' is!!*
a played punch, but doubles as a personal
•I 'eat mcs' like him, usin my 'savage bars for meals'..
•I'll fuckin 'blow him up' like his 'avatar were real'!!*
i can't understand the first line (maybe reading it wrong) second line is good personal
Fuck the rest, Talksick won.