ArChiTeCt Of TiMe

granites of time falling in a hour glass waitin on no man/
planets alined an drawing our masses closer to the omen/
magnets pull and keep everything in place/
gadgets an tools cant sea the deep blue but reach into space/
fragments from the moon proove they won the race/
nasa landed in arizona, taped it an said they landed on the face/
who knows nothings impossible, but time reveals the truth to theories/
eyes been seen good an evil an the realm between me an reality/
lies begin to unravel before judgement hits the gavel/
breakin the barrier from the handle/
shaken the interior of the symbol on a bill behind the candle/
im maken time ripple, if life is a grain then the universe is my gravel /
an i never go against them just laugh cuz my world is what i make of it/
so clever had sense scince ten you do the math i just shift an shape it/
an arcitech of the matrix shape shifting time till space is not wasted/
face it the universe is never ending?but a begining always has an ending/
pace urself an leave nothing pending,or your loose ends will be needin tending/
so quit pretending you livin complete when all my life somethings been missing/
so i sit an listen to channels an tune my brain into the other percent im not using/
study with monks learning the steps to achive my chee an the key to tibet/
power of focusing the energies in my body to heal an protect/
in all do respect its time for a change and the hour glass is set/
in incrimants of seconds waiting for no man so lifes a bet/

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...en-381460.html
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nt-381034.html
theres 2

Cool topic again....you seem to have alot of fresh ideas that you're eager to write about man. It was cool what you were talking about but in places it wasn't fun to read it.....I don't see why you posted it in Blue or whatever.

anyways...after every line you don't have to put.../
if its not in paragraph form we can tell where the rhythms stop.

face it the universe is never ending?but a begining always has an ending/
pace urself an leave nothing pending,or your loose ends will be needin tending/
so quit pretending you livin complete when all my life somethings been missing/
so i sit an listen to channels an tune my brain into the other percent im not using/
study with monks learning the steps to achive my chee an the key to tibet/
power of focusing the energies in my body to heal an protect/
these were your strongest lines IMO.
liked the assonance in them....

peace and stay up.....
Sincerely want to see more from you in later weeks...and months.

outtie.

I thought this was an alright piece, the title was nice, the approach was solid. Could of flowed a little better.

study with monks learning the steps to achive my chee an the key to tibet/
power of focusing the energies in my body to heal an protect/
in all do respect its time for a change and the hour glass is set/
in incrimants of seconds waiting for no man so lifes a bet/

that was my favorite part.

Keep spittin

thanx homies

uppin